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Tips on writing more effectively (visit the link)


Mustafa1991 8 / 373 4  
Jul 25, 2010   #1
hubpages.com/profile/Sullen91

Once you visit the link, check out the article I wrote, "Communicate more mindfully and better demonstrate your point."

Let me know what you think. Thanks.
meisj0n 8 / 272 2  
Jul 25, 2010   #2
They emphasize the willingness of a second party to even make an effort at understanding your message.

I didn't quite catch this, but everything before sounds very clear.

overabundance of vague intensifiers (e.g. really, very, greatly)

hehe
I need to work on this

rendering an incoherent thought

rendering a thought incoherent*?
use a fancy word in a humorous/iresome way. I know I sometimes do that. Question to you, what do you suggest as the limit to using words intentionally for multiple meanings? I sometimes do that to allow the sentence to have two or more meanings, which both are viable.

"This hub is not published, only you can see it." < I get that there's misuse of the comma, which could also be a modifier issue. I didn't quite understand what you meant though.

Hehe. Revisions :] Cheers~

Note: Strange. This thread got deleted:? second time today
OP Mustafa1991 8 / 373 4  
Jul 25, 2010   #3
sullen91:
rendering an incoherent thought vs. rendering a thought incoherent*?

Wow, you could be right. I hope I was using the sense of "render" that means "translate", whereas your revision is using the sense of "render" that means "make or cause to become." You know, I rely so much on intuition that I am convinced my use of "render" was of the third sense, below, as in, to translate. The part that came before the text of mine you quoted, actually was referring to the use of the thesaurus. So, it makes sense that a boring word, replaced by a thesaurus word, would sometimes render an incoherent thought. The inapplicable word is rendered as an incoherent thought. I think the way I ended up writing it, occurred subconsciously, and, I would do just as well or better to write it your way. Your rendition is linear, since it means to act on a thought, causing it to become incoherent. My rendition is artistic, since "7.Include words they found in a thesaurus, thereby rendering an incoherent thought", with the word "thereby" (by that means or because of that), implies that the inclusion of the words found is rendered into an incoherent thought. Both ways work, but mine is less straightforward and more self-indulgent.

Oxford (the best dictionary, period, in my opinion):

2 [with object] cause to be or become; make:
the rains rendered his escape impossible

3 represent or depict artistically:
the eyes and the cheeks are exceptionally well rendered
- translate:the phrase was rendered into English

sullen91:
They emphasize the willingness of a second party to even make an effort at understanding your message.I didn't quite catch this, but everything before sounds very clear.

I meant that those three points (they) determine the motivation level of the reader.

I'm not sure what you mean with respect to

using words intentionally for multiple meanings

. I have an idea, but I'm not sure. If you mean switching up the way you say things, then I understand what you mean, and it requires more elaboration on your part, as to the context.
ershad193 14 / 333 5  
Jul 25, 2010   #4
This is excellent!

I learned a lot. I make most of the mistakes you pointed out there. Thanks for writing it, and posting the link.

meisj0n:
sullen91:
rendering an incoherent thought vs. rendering a thought incoherent*?

I don't think your one has any problem. When I was reading the text, I was following your train of thought. Hence, I got the contextual meaning, and it made complete sense to me.

but revision only makes sense to a point

haha...I agree.

P.S. I understood "labyrinthine", "cogitate", and "plethora". I guess I'm getting better...hahaha...
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jul 27, 2010   #5
I learned a lot, too. I love the trick you did with the long sentence and the words not-to-use. This is good writing advice, because it is bold. Do not use "plethora." Ha ha, I have to agree...

Hey, I recently learned that there is a term for that comms-in-place-of-a-period thing you mentioned. "Comma Splice"
OP Mustafa1991 8 / 373 4  
Jul 27, 2010   #6
I made a note of the comma splice terminology, captain. Thanks to all who looked over my post. :)
ershad193 14 / 333 5  
Jul 28, 2010   #7
Hey Mustafa

I read the other article you wrote -- "the art of taking multiple choice tests". I was impressed by the techniques you demonstrated to find out the correct answer. I believe they will work very well on subjects like economics, but I'm not sure about their effectiveness on science subjects.

I have taken more multiple choice tests in scientific subjects than I can remember, and the answer choices in most of them were usually numbers or single-word terms. I found that a lack of thorough knowledge of the topics included in the exam often led to mistakes.

Anyway, I don't visit hubpages, so I don't know to whom that article was intended. If it was a general one, I think the title could be changed slightly. Maybe, to "The art of taking multiple choice tests in _______".
OP Mustafa1991 8 / 373 4  
Jul 28, 2010   #8
Well, the audience at Hubpages is not big on scholarly articles. It is enough that I wrote on a topic about education. Most users are not students, so narrowing the title to a specific subject would only hurt. Those people who do read, probably read for the hell of it, because it is interesting; I doubt they remember anything they read about how one answer choice is not viable for such and such reasons.


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