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In the words of Adlai E. StevensonII,
"If we value the pursuit of knowledge, we must be free to follow wherever that search may lead us. The free mind is not a barking dog, to be tethered on a ten-foot chain.
Growing up in a modest family of four was somewhat challenging
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y parents had to engage in lots of activities to provide for the family. I had been motivated to succeed academically ever since my mother
used to run ran
a restaurant and my fatherserved in the Federal Ministry of Education
a civil servant at the education ministry
Myself and mM
y siblings and I
assisted our parents in running the restaurant. It was not easy though, but we had to help out, so as to increase the family's earnings. In high school I had
strong likeness a passion
for mathematics, physics and technical drawing,
and when I was
about to decide deliberating
on my future career,
I opted for a
mechanical engineering degree at Lagos State University, Nigeria.
Studying mechanical engineering at the
undergraduate level exposed me to in-
depth engineering principles and
applications. My forte
is in the
areas of thermodynamics and fluid mechanics. I
was opportuned took an opportunity
undergo a six month internship intern
at a manufacturing company in Nigeria
and these for six months. This
allowed me to put some of my engineering lessons to practice.
did a project worked
on "the design, construction and performance evaluation of a land tilling power cultivator for use in small scale farming"
my final year.
this period, I was appointed the chairman of the advisory council of the
Mechanical Engineering Students' Association and worked together with other members of the council and executives to run the association effectively.
graduating from the university in April 2007, I joined a computer programming company as a trainee software developer and Linux/Unix operating systems administrator. I
trained for a year on computer programming with Java, C/C++ and the Linux/Unix
. I decided to take
opportunity because of my plans to pursue a graduate degree program in the
future and the importance of programming in scientific research. Recently,
in recent time
attended training courses and workshops in
plant designs PDMS(
Plant Design Management Systems
, stress analysis softwarein Caesar II
and MATLAB so as to foster my scientific and technical
scientifically and technically
After my undergraduate degree,
I participated in a one-year National Youth Service Corps
Yobe state, in the North Eastern part of northeastern
The program is a compulsory scheme It was compulsory
for all Nigerian graduates during this period
I served as a
metal work metalworking
instructor in a vocational training center and
I organize organized
community development services, involving
educational counseling to the village pupils
with some of colleagues regularly
I am confident that I have gained enough knowledge both in and outside the classroom required for graduate studies,
and I intend to pursue my master'
s degree program in mechanical engineering at your institution witha
focus in Thermo-Fluid Sciences.
My research interests in this area are C
omputational Fluid Dynamics modeling computational fluid dynamics
, convective heat transfer and
After completing my master'
s degree in these areas or related ones, I intend to pursue my PhD immediately
afterwards start an active research and teaching career,
my knowledge for the benefit of humanity. The
University of Manitoba is obviously an ivory tower for learning and re
art facilities and highly respected academic tutors,
that the school has, Its that I would receive all
for actualizing my goals. I am confidentthat,
if given a chance to pursue a graduatedegree
in my cho
sen field at
the institution as much as myself.