DS, please allow me to make some suggestions that will help you clean up the look and content of your statement of purpose. You will find my suggestions below.
Growing up, I always found myself to be at the bottom, during high school.
- I always found myself at the bottom of the social chain when I was in high school.Within minutes, I got hooked on the subjectand throughout practical hours I wa s one of the few students who could program in the C language.
- ... hooked on the subject and
surprised people when I became one of the few students who could program...
- DS, you have spent way too much time discussing your accomplishments as a student. While you did develop an interesting program, that is not the focal point of a statement of purpose. Instead, you should be talking about your future plans and how your masters studies fit into that quest. Talk about your future program development and and how the university can help you accomplish your future goals. That is the kind of information that makes an effective statement of purpose. Just skim over your educational attainments and projects, an in-depth discussion is not necessary because those are past achievements. You should be looking towards and discussing your future plans instead.