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'I joined a worldwide leading service oilfield company' - SOP for Master in Petroleum Engineering


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Jun 19, 2009   #1
Can you please give me feedback on my Statement of Purpose?

Since I was in High School I had a profound interest for Science which led to my decision of electing engineering as a profession. During my undergraduate studies in Chemical Engineering I was exposed to various specialties within this major field of study, but it was petroleum engineering that attracted my attention.

I joined a worldwide leading service oilfield company 7 years ago right after I graduated from college. During this time I have acquired invaluable experience while been exposed to different environments around the world. I have worked in Ecuador, Mexico, United Arab Emirates and currently in the US. This exposure have enriched my knowledge and developed my skills to analyze complex situations from different perspectives for the creation of innovative solutions for cementing oil and gas wells.

While working in the north of Mexico, I did a 'thesis-like' project for cementing HPHT gas wells with loss circulation problems. After an exhaustive reasearch work of 8 months I accomplished my goal by developing a special cement system for effective annular placement in these complex fields. The successful implementation with excellent results led to its application in other parts of the country for which I received special recognition from the Client for the value of the solution provided. This was the first big milestone in my professional development and an important achievement that trigged my fascination in advanced research projects.

Later on while working in the southeastern part of Mexico, I participated in another research project to create an extreme low density cement slurry for applications in depleted zones. After 6 months of research we developed the system and achieved a worldwide record for it. Parallel to this, I was also working in the development of a water control solution to reduce the water/oil ratio in production wells. I developed a special technique based on advanced technologies combination and an optimized placement procedure. After a couple of successful jobs we became the main service provider for water control in the southeastern part of Mexico.

My work and contributions to the oilfield industry have been recognized in several ocassions. I have 3 published articles in the national Pemex magazzine, 2 presentations in a yearly technical event in Mexico, a nomination in the worlwide event for business innovation, Stock Rewards, and the opportunity to attend a specialized course in Austria.

With my strong engineering background and the oilfield experience I have acquired, a Master in Petroleum Engineering will enhance my knowledge for a deeper understanding of specific subjects in this major field of study. The master will enrich my educational profile and broden my background to interact with other disciplines in a confident and competent way. Thus, it will give me the necessary qualifications to become a strong and competitive technical leader in the future. At the same time, it will give me a broader vision towards the oilfield business to perform key roles in higher positions within the company.

Upon my completion of the master degree, I would like to focus production optimization and the evaluation of engineering methods to maximize oil and gas well performance. In addition, my international experience will bring value to class discussions and projects from different perspectives.

I am highly motivated to pursue a Master degree in the Petroleum Industry in a serious and commited way. I look forward to it.
t3h50 2 / 7  
Jun 19, 2009   #2
Well, you do seem to have a strong background in this field, but you need to carefully go through the entire essay and correct grammar and spelling errors.

Just to get you started...
paragraph 2:
"This exposure havehas"
paragraph 5:
occasions
magazine
worldwide
paragraph 6:
broaden
EF_Simone 2 / 1,986  
Jun 19, 2009   #3
Upon my completion of the master degree, I would like to focus production optimization and the evaluation of engineering methods to maximize oil and gas well performance. In addition, my international experience will bring value to class discussions and projects from different perspectives.

This paragraph is incoherent. What you will bring to class discussions should be in an earlier paragraph, along with other reasons you will be a worthwhile addition to this educational institution. What you will do with your degree belongs where it is but should be followed by a sentence or two providing more detail or explaining why this will be useful to the world.
EF_Sean 6 / 3,491  
Jun 20, 2009   #4
You need a stronger intro, too. "Since I was in High School I had a profound interest for Science which led to my decision of electing engineering as a profession." So, what you are saying is that you went into engineering because you liked science. That's pretty vague, and doesn't really catch the reader's attention or make you stand out at all from all of the other applicants. You might want to just cut your first paragraph altogether, and start right in with your oil company work as your opening.

You might also consider cutting your last two paragraphs, and simply tacking on an additional sentence to what will then be your last paragraph in order to get something that sounds like a conclusion.


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