Chalmers,a well-known school;Letter of Motivation-Master in Quality & Operations Mgmt

Hello. I am currently writing Motivation letter for a masters program.
It is the first time and for that reason i'm not sure exactly how to write it. I made one out of tips and tricks from several different pages, but i think that this forum can give me the best advice.

I would like people to give me feedback on what i can do better, but also if there is something well done.

Notice: This Letter of Motivation will not be read by the school itself, it is going to the application service that handles all applications for the Universities in Sweden. Although i have heard that i could write a longer one since the current is about 300-320 words.

Best regards, Mike
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Dear Mr. or Mrs.

I hereby want to declare my interest in participating in the Master's Program of Quality and Operations Management at Chalmers University of Technology. I want to take my interest in this field one step further and I am certain that my academic background in Industrial Engineering, international experience and my interest in digging deeper into the knowledge about production and quality management will prove successful.

I am taking my BSc in Industrial Engineering - Work Organization and Leadership this semester. During these years I deepened my knowledge in economics, logistics and operations management. I participated in ERASMUS exchange program and spent one semester abroad last fall at Reutlingen University, Germany. I studied the Production Management program and got the chance to see the production of BMW, Mercedes-Benz and others in Europe's leading industrial nation along courses in Lean Management, Supply Chain Management etc.

After taking these courses and spending time in Germany, I am now certain that it is in this area I intend to get specialized, and that I have a good base to stand on. After going through the courses offered at the program I am sure that the Master Program will deeper my knowledge in managing production, operations and quality at level, which will give me the best conditions for a future career within this area. Chalmers is a well-known school both national and international which certainly can offer me the best quality and knowledge needed.

During my studies I've working with sales/logistics, this make me used to having a lot going on. I'm sure that I'm ready for studying at a higher level. I'm looking forward to getting the chance on the Masters program. Through my interest and with the help of the education on Chalmers I hope to be able to contribute to companies and the society in the future.

Thank you for your consideration.

I'm sure that I'm ready for gaining advance knowledge.
You talk about your professional goal in depth, but you don't talk much about in which way you intend to contribute to the technical development of your home country. I guess it is an important feature in a letter of motivation.

Thanks a lot for the feedback. Things like this is hard to notice for me when i am writing it myself.

About the way you "way you intend to contribute to the technical development of your home country", is this still a feature that i should write about when the school is one in my own home country?

Thanks again and thanks a lot in advance!

/Mike

Hmmmmmmmmm... a tricky issue :D
.... I think you better mention about this at the beginning and apply it differently. You replace the "home country" by your local community. However, make a note of it before you start your real essay :)

Improve the tone, improve its presentation and don't loose the focus on you. Good Luck!