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The constantly changing environment of the petroleum industry presents many challenges. Knowledge of the industry, along with good business acumen, is required to make quick, strategic business decisions. The Executive MBA program at XXXXX can provide me with the business skills required to make these critical decisions. The AACSB accredited XXXXX MBA represents a great value and essential addition to my technical background that will help accelerate my career in business management.
While attending XXXXXXX University for my undergraduate degree in chemistry, I was awarded a summer internship with XXXXXX. After earning a Bachelor of Science degree in 2001, my employment with XXXXXXX continued as a QA/QC chemist. During my four years in this role, I gained an understanding of the products manufactured by XXXXXX. In early 2006, I was given the task of relocating a hydrotreating pilot plant from XXXXXX to XXXXXX, setting up the equipment, and managing the operations going forward. This project created XXXXXXX Process and Product Development (PPD) Facility.
While managing and operating the PPD Facility, I am able to use my experience, education, and mechanical aptitude to refine XXXXXX hydrotreating process and evaluate new potential petroleum feedstock components and hydrotreating catalysts. This position has also allowed me to be innovative and demonstrate my organizational skills, self-motivation, and dedication. The information generated from the various pilot evaluations allows the management group to make strategic business decisions regarding feedstock and catalyst procurement. This decision making process roused my interest in obtaining a graduate degree in business and the desire to be involved in management.
I have become very interested in the different factors that are associated with making business decisions, including economics, finance, and operations management. An MBA from XXXXX would immediately provide me with the business skills needed to be a more valuable member of the management team. In addition, this degree would provide the training needed to achieve my short-term goal of becoming an operations manager at XXXXXXX production hydroplant. While managing the hydroplant, I would gain valuable experience supervising both salaried and bargaining unit employees while increasing my knowledge of XXXXXXX full scale manufacturing process.
The ever-changing climate of the petroleum industry commands XXXXXXX to continuously look for new ways to stay competitive. A major factor of XXXXXX competitive edge is feedstock supply and utilization. My long-term goal is to become heavily involved in strategic raw material procurement. The challenges of this area, including team-building and management, are very attractive to me. My knowledge of the company's products and processing capability have given me a solid background of XXXXXXX manufacturing processes, but the XXXXXX MBA will give me a solid understanding of XXXXXX as a business (economic decision analysis, financial planning, etc.). This education would open the opportunities necessary to accomplish both my short-term and long-term goals.
There are many MBA programs to choose from, but the Executive MBA Program at XXXXXX is my choice for several reasons. As a recent participant of XXXXXX MBA certificate program, I had the opportunity to meet XXXXX business faculty and experience the different instruction styles first hand. Additionally, as an AACSB accredited program, XXXXXX MBA presents a great value when compared to other area programs, and the Saturday only schedule allows me to continue my career without interruption. XXXXXX program also offers several courses that are of particular interest to me, including Managerial Economics, Financial Management, Operations Management, and Supply Chain Management.
While XXXXXX MBA program will provide me with a wealth of knowledge, I hope to provide something to the program in return. As an employee of one of the area's only oil refineries, I hope to bring unique ideas and experiences to the classroom. My chemistry background will also add to the diversity of the cohort. Just as I experienced during the MBA certificate program, I expect to learn from the other students in addition to the instructors.