statement of purpose for electrical and computer department(please review)

"Passion in life built around learning newer things and enhancing one's own skills driven by commitment makes one successful in life"- is what was told to me by my grandfather.
Every decision that I have made till now was driven by this guidance statement and I feel that my firm belief, continuous undeterred hard work will take me to heights of success in present and future too. I have always enjoyed being one among the top 5 performers all through my academics. Presently in my engineering, I have a distinction to my credit with an overall aggregate of 77.55%.
I never missed an opportunity to branch out my areas of interest to translate into a quality individual with flair for learning and excellence. The basic temperament and attitude to be a part of innovative team prompted me to choose specialisation of Electrical and Electronics Engineering at , <college name>, to carry out various innovative projects and give shape to budding ideas from the students. Thanks to the faculty and inspiring seniors, I felt that I was at the right place to start my quest.
The active participation in students' community forum to develop a portal <student activity> " to answer all the queries of multi domain students gave me a platform to contribute and share the knowledge with a 5000memeber base.
The passion to understand and share changing trends helped me to present a few papers at tech festivals and inter university symposia.
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I did my project work at <company name>, on ' <project title>', used in the control of automated trains is presently being implemented by a Fortune 500 company in Germany.
The concepts are many more like Nano designing which promise eternity are the focus areas.
The revolutionary I pod to new generation gadgets with several inbuilt features supported by tech applications of Digital Signal Processing, Linear and Digital Integrated Circuits or Microprocessor and micro Controllers is bound to result in many more innovations to make this world beautiful through virtual realities.
I wish to be a part of this technological evolution by pursuing higher education to understand the complexities and the unlocking. The reputation, recognition of university name are highly encouraging and I will be elated to be apart of the quality student community to enrich and accomplish as a part of this high end technology driven society. I put forth my request to consider my application and provide me the opportunity to be a part of your learning community on virtues.

My Grandfather once gave me important advice, and the excellent way articulated it compelled me to write it down, so that I would never forget: "Passion in life built around learning new things and enhancing one's own skills -- driven by commitment -- this is what makes one successful in life."

Above, that is a suggestion for revising the intro. Just my idea, maybe it does not seem right to you.

You seem very smart, you'll definitely get in! Like many smart people, your sentences tend to be long; I suggest getting comfortable with the use of semi-colons and dashes -- the things that make long sentences more manageable.

I also suggest some brevity. Start a paragraph with a short sentence, and then follow with longer ones, as I am doing right here. Vary sentence length. You already write very well, very intelligently, so now you should try to do it with soothing rhythm.

Great job!

thank u so much. i wil wrk on the changes :)

Indeed. I'd say you should try revising this so that the word count is around 2/3 of what it currently is. That should greatly strengthen the essay.