Graduate Admission Essays

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The very next day he was waiting outside my cabin, and once I arrived he started asking... »»

Since my early childhood, I had decided that I wanted a career in technology. After completing my... »»

Definitely a good essay. One thing I forgot to mention before, though: "was not focused... »»

I first met Mr. Gray when he asked me to become his adviser in developing a small... »»

My undergraduate experience at _____ enabled me to realize my own voice within art and design and... »»

I have to disagree; I really like how you started like that. I write like that too.... »»

Thanks Kevin for your valuable input. :) Can you please help me in improving the second... »»

htomcat: First of all, a few words about my personality and character. This part above does... »»

It is my absolute pleasure to write this statement of purpose to explain about my interests and... »»

First, participating in professional development and internship opportunities at school or companies which involve large systems, large... »»

This first paragraph has TOO MUCH telling the reader obvious things: The World has entered in... »»

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Whichever approach you take, just remember that your ultimate goal is to show the admissions officers that... »»

Thanks Constance for the explanation, I agree with you that it might sound different for different... »»

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However, devising one's goals is an extremely tough task, but even more difficult is attaining those goals.... »»

This is an excellent essay, and all I can say is that the school will be lucky... »»

I am benefited by the polytechnic and university's diverse syllabus content, which have given me a comprehensive... »»

Hi Amber , I read you essay and it seems good for education major. I'm planning... »»

This essay is excellent! You cannot help but write an impressive essay, because you truly are a... »»

Why apply for a Flagship Fellowship? As a veteran of the Intelligence Community, I have an awareness... »»

You've done a great job writing this essay. The grammar is nearly flawless, and your style flows... »»

You could improve the flow of your essay a bit by avoiding unnecessary passive constructions. So, for... »»

Yes, good advice! For question #1, add a sentence about the specific sustainable energy initiatives that... »»

Just more of the same sort of thing I mentioned before. So, "My plan is to engage... »»

Here is some more help ffor the first paragraph: "Oh, not again!" I was standing at... »»

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Separate two or more adjectives with commas: Apart from studying law during my graduation years, I... »»

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It certainly is unique and interesting. If you can say more with fewer words and make... »»

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In addition to what Sean suggested, I also think that, as sublime guessed, they are definitely looking... »»

I took all of the advice in mind and made some modifications. Thanks again for... »»

Well, I am wondering what unique interests you have, even deeper than the field you are trying... »»

Hi! No, this is not a report about the field of study. This should be... »»

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Oh, good choice! That is cool. I hope you have lots of success with it!... »»

Well, there is a limit to how much time I can spend with it, but naturally there... »»

No, none of those words are proper nouns, just technical terms and devices. If you are... »»

As a student at ______ I plan to share the story of my experiences, interests, and creativity,... »»

French is more than my native language, and France is more than my home country; they are... »»

I tried to write some ideas and this is the result.I will aprteciate if you help me.... »»

Hi Pavan! Use Google to look for some samples of statements of purpose, so you can see... »»

I believe that it is pivotal to take all that I have gained and use it to... »»

I appreciate your rapid reply and encouraging comments! Kevin, thank you! Tim »»

Thank you very much I'm going to edit it. Once again, thanks a lot »»

you didn't mention anything about the program? »»

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Good afternoon :) This piece is a very well thought out and explained persuasive essay. Good... »»

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Good evening :) Since I have already commented on sections of this essay, I am going... »»

Good afternoon. Here are my thoughts: "With Louise's instruction, I analyzed the expansion of higher... »»

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Good afternoon. The prompt asks you to put forth an original idea and support it, so... »»