Graduate Admission Essays

I suppose "especially" wouldn't actually be wrong, exactly. It just sounds off to me when it's used... »»

The hardest thing about this type of writing is getting started, so just write down whatever you... »»

Thank you Sean »»

A couple of minor fixes for your intro: "Engineering is the foundation on which humankind builds... »»

Hi JVS, instead of asking people to email their essays to you, please just browse around in... »»

I believe that learning something is an endless journey in a person's life. This is because; I... »»

I think you should cut the first sentence and start with the second one. The first... »»

Oh, I see what you mean now. You could try "Though I chose not to complete... »»

Thanks for all your feedback. I have made the changes and submitted the final draft. So we... »»

All corrections noted. Thank you very much »»

Thanks a lot for your input, I really appreciate it. »»

bcassidy82: My interest in Chemical Engineering began as a fascination with all sciences in grade school. Generally... »»

Kasi, when you post a draft for us to look at, please start a new thread.... »»

The paragraph is looking pretty strong now. I'd change the first sentence back to "I am engineer... »»

The essay definitely isn't boring or heavy to read -- you seem genuinely excited by issue of... »»

Thank you Kevin for your help and guidance. All the bests :) »»

The world is closer to a viral pandemic now than at any other ... non-communicable... »»

Thanks for the input guys. I read the responses and I am thinking about it more deeply... »»

During my Master, I had to provide a Thesis in order to be graduated, and I chose... »»

This is very impressive! Some of your sentences are unnecessarily long, though: Along with my... »»

...so that I can get ample exposure to the technological advances and allow myself to contribute to... »»

EF_Kevin: Rosomond, I think that is what was needed! Cool Not compared to you! :) »»

That reference to Hamlet made it sound like you thought he was a real historical figure (i.e.... »»

You might also want to consider combining some of your sentences. At the moment, they all tend... »»

Hi Kevin Thanks you very much. that helped me. you guys didn't let me down.... »»

Thanks olam and kevin!! »»

Thanks Essay Forum. Thanks Everybody for sharing the knowledge. »»

hi ananth...excellent job!! your achievements are very impressive. i have a few suggestions. i think u... »»

If there is no obvious tie-in between the two, focus on making your reasons for changing as... »»

During my secondary education, I accumulated hands-on experience in adjusting and operating experimental equipments, acquiring and analyzing... »»

Thank you so much kevin and sean. »»

Since graduating in 1998 with my bachelors in nursing[/font], I [font#FF0000]have had numerous clinical and personal experiences... »»

Thank you..diligently working on it. »»

thank you fuzzy and kevin. I have already done the revision that you suggested. However, I am... »»

It is my overwhelming desire to learn, innovate, and teach that compels me to continue my education... »»

Hey guys thanks alot for all the positive feedback and the critique i really appreciate it »»

[/b]The reason why I choose to study abroad is to extend my horizons, especially in ways that... »»

Thanks Kevin! Any other suggestions from anyone? Is it good to go? I really need to get... »»

This seems too unfocused and general to be a graduate admissions essay. Are you sure you posted... »»

Thank you both very much for your feedback! »»

kyari: Why do so many people die each year of preventable diseases? Rather than repeating... »»

Great choice of action. I agree that e-commerce is a great thing to study. So, why... »»

Thank you Kevin. definitely, I will implement your suggestions. »»

Try combining para #3 with that short para #4 and take out the unnecessary sentence: My... »»

The others are right -- you need to talk more about the relationship between the program and... »»

These subjects led me to realize that my main interest lies in moral and political philosophy.... »»

thanks, it;s statement of purpose. I will work more on that. ^^ »»

I think it is important to show that you are ready, and that you are serious, by... »»

so helpful! thanks a lot! »»

I think you should write out the word six instead of 6. Also, the paragraph that... »»

"I want to go to the school because it has a stellar reputation in my concentration area,... »»

thank you so much, Kevin, these parts are edited :). »»

Once you have the basic elements of your response in the right order, though, there is no... »»

How about saying "Shell Corporation" for that first sentence, so that the reader is sure what you... »»

All of the below seems a tad off topic. It is interesting and well-written, but it doesn't... »»

I am not sure whether you can have more words in your essay but My long... »»

This is a pretty strong essay already. You might want to tone down on your use of... »»

Dear the admissions committee members: Thank you for letting me introduce myself to you. My name... »»

lack of help available for children with learning disabilities overlooking children with learning disabilities students with physical/mental... »»

very interesting essay.......good starting »»