Graduate Admission Essays

Skip the first line. Go through what you have now, editing ruthlessly to take out anything you... »»

I have seen they like specifics as well as introducing yourself. Like you are going to an... »»

M Ehsan ul Haq: Through my undergraduate studies and professional experience I have prepared myself to pursue... »»

Why do you mention business leaders? The prompt specifically asks you to discuss public officials. I... »»

tsp8487: Worse more, I am such person that often labeled as skip-thinker. Tell us what you mean... »»

I'm no expert, but here is what I saw/suggestions: odd: With diligent preparation and... »»

I am in favor of Simone. What you really should focus on is the last sentense. Since... »»

Thanks Sean,it really helped me drafting the last part. Regards Hyat »»

Thank you so much, I will definitely let you know how it goes. You have been a... »»

OmbreGracieuse: I understand psychology very well, Then you certainly shouldn't imply otherwise. Maybe you could... »»

"The author" works. Or "the newspaper," or "the article." These all would be more standard, and accurate,... »»

This would be great if it were being written as a TOEFL essay. For a GRE essay,... »»

Thank you for the comments - this is very useful. I found it extremely difficult... »»

I notice that you work implicitly within Maslow's hierarchy of needs, which asserts that people will not... »»

Superkid: To start my discussion, a question should be answered in the first place: Superkid: Having... »»

What you have now is a good starting point. You have a clear stance on the issue... »»

To improve your sentence by noticing that DON'T MISS WORDS, I believe your essay will be more... »»

You need to elaborate more on your examples. At the moment, you are not using them to... »»

Right, either you want a pure cover letter that says nothing other than "here are my materials"... »»

GeneK: lead a very international team I don't know if a team can be "very" international.... »»

The example is your first sentence. Who or what is the subject of that sentence? A stint.... »»

Both of these essays are very strong in content. I invite everyone to help you fix up... »»

prasun8463: Any tips on what can be skimmed( Realizing this as an opportunity to be counted upon,... »»

You're very welcome! To show your gratitude, pitch in and help somebody else with their essay. There... »»

Ulribe: It is written as a practice for a GRE issue essay (as it says in the... »»

Dindi: "After witnessing failing attempts to implement peace strategies on local communities, I realized it was time... »»

EF_Simone: Actually, more and more historians, starting with Eric Foner, have been writing history "from the ground... »»

Thank you, Noto. I can understand the difference between great discoveries and the greatest discoveries. Your revision... »»

@Simone Thanks Simone for the reply »»

Well, I want to add some transition words to make paragraphs more coherent. »»

Start by saying what aspect of software engineering you want to research, and then narrow it down... »»

One of the strengths of this essay is its nuance. Your distinction between academic fields and the... »»

EF_Sean: I'm not sure why you think that e.g. would be preferable As the sentence is constructed,... »»

By "tightening," I mean get rid of superfluous words and phrases: One day, a chemistry professor... »»

Start with the paragraph that begins with the quote. After telling the story of your work with... »»

Hi, Liebe: By the way, what was the challenging situation? THe project. Or telling the manager... »»

oh a lot of mistakes TT thank you very much for all,,,^^ i wanna write... »»

My new purpose of staement please see if this is better thank you in advance!... »»

thank you for your feed back that was really useful. »»

Try to say everything you do now in your essay, but in about 70% of the current... »»

"I thought that chemical engineering was the only field which involved study of the basic sciences and... »»

Also, you might want to try to tie together all of the items you list so that... »»

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EF_Simone: They feel childish or foolish because they have to use such simple sentences in the new... »»

Ah, yes, I see. Coming at the end of your penultimate paragraph, it's easy to miss. I'd... »»

And in addition to the "what," you might want to touch on the "why". Why are you... »»

Kaella: I am basically interested in finding a job that I feel helps other people and makes... »»

Thank you. I will rephrase the entire paragraph. »»

thank you very much simone and sean... i really appreciate your help.. yes i've learnt a lot..... »»

A big thanks to Liebe and Sean. I am literally "reworking" it. :) »»

thanks a lot for advices!!!I make over my essay! »»

You are from Iran? Cheetori? Khobam? That is as good as my Farsi gets. »»

You need a stronger intro, too. "Since I was in High School I had a profound interest... »»

You seem to want to do something involving human rights. That's nice. In fact, it is like... »»

You guys are good. Thanks much. »»

Thank you Simone. »»

You need to bridge the Nightingale story and your paragraph about your current goals. You go from... »»

Once you have given help or feedback to another user, you will be able to start a... »»

I suppose "especially" wouldn't actually be wrong, exactly. It just sounds off to me when it's used... »»

The hardest thing about this type of writing is getting started, so just write down whatever you... »»