Graduate Admission Essays

Hello! I think ten is better than 10 Need a comma: ...working as a humanitarian aid... »»

Hi Lisa, I can see that you are a very methodical thinker. I often recommend to... »»

Thank you guys for the help! Kevin, if i am not asking too much can u give... »»

Hi, I'm applying for MFA. And it may be kind of ridiculous questions for someone. But I... »»

Hello everybody... I have been trying to put together some ideas for my SOP...and I have... »»

Dear Mohit, I'm going to try helping you here, but I think you should submit your... »»

Yeah, i don't think I've ever been compelled to tell someone, yes! send it in!... »»

alibaba 1983: Apart from the Bank of England, I ... question at the end of this current... »»

thnx u soo muchh ;) »»

i am myself writing a sop for the first time in my life, so i dunno if... »»

I suggest writing second instead of 2nd. I was not completely satisfied with the knowledge... »»

Having entered to the fascinating world of Visual Arts has... ...was the piece that introduced me... »»

I never got that saying...why was the red sky so delightful to the shepherds? But red skies... »»

Thank you so much for your suggestions!! »»

jensy: My primary research interest is drug designing for cancer cure I think this sentence is... »»

Google this: Canada Petroleum Engineering Programs. I found this right away for you: http://www.canadian-universities.net/Universities/Programs/P etroleum_Engineering.html... »»

Wow! What I would really like to see is a combination of both. I love the beginning... »»

The boundless possibilities for innovation and the sudden revelations that stimulate one for further analysis of a... »»

I'll close the thread right now. You can see the TOS for explanations of everything. Thanks!!!... »»

What you can do is "support" all the topics by listing them in one of the sentences... »»

Yes, it is great that you are practicing too write in a way that soothes the reader... »»

Prevent is a better word here: would prevent me from doing well in America, Hearing... »»

EF_Susan Yup.. Thank yu so much @ EF_Susan I have added that stuff is to explain... »»

You know, there is a technique used in hypnosis called "age regression," and it involves saying something... »»

Yes, I agree that it is good to eliminate all unnecessary details. But if you can... »»

Thanks for your valuable suggestion. I am applying the changes. »»

As the daughter of a Civil Engineer, I have been exposed to (list specific things) since my... »»

Thanks again Kevin for your comment, especially the second error you found. I totally appreciate it :)... »»

Yes, it is great... I did not know the word plenitude until now, thank you! »»

This is excellent, and I think is responds well to the essay prompt. You seem very... »»

You have to post it here to get my feedback! But I understand if it is... »»

I think the most important thing is to write with your PURPOSE in mind. What is... »»

Dear Kevin & Alexandr, Thanks so much for reviewing my essays eventhough I have closed it...... »»

hello at the end you should also say that you appreciate it for them to... »»

Oh, good point Jeanie, we are lucky to have you here. This looks very... »»

thank you a lot, Mr.EF_Kevin »»

Sorry... was out of town and so couldn't reply. Thank You so much. I'll try... »»

Well, it is not all background, not all history, because they ask for "how you might contribute... »»

Yes, I agree with Janson... Janson, I have seen a lot of good contributions you... »»

Thanks guys..will work on it and put it up again!! »»

That first sentence could be better if you define design a little more... Methodical design surrounds...... »»

thanks a million. »»

Thank you for your valuable feedback, Kevin and tjchenfeng!!! I tried to work out a... »»

Hi! I agree with durian. You need to add a spark into your sop. It shouldn't... »»

Good point--absolutely! I would still take a close look at their output (student careers), curriculum, and... »»

Jean253, thanks a lot for your response. Basically I want to do a masters in... »»

Gwendolyn, You're a great writer with a firm grasp on mechanics. Your personal story takes guts... »»

Hi Masoud, As far as the words in red: -MSc: don't use the abbreviation--expand it... »»

Hi , you have actually written very good SOP , I could not see any of... »»

The length varies a lot. Undergrads often write shorter ones than grad student applications. Two pages... »»

Wow, very impressive. you started 2 sentences with "By." How about this for the... »»

See the TOS, it explains everything. :-) »»

I think you should not begin the essay with a cliche. It is a fitting cliche, but... »»

Kevin, Thank you very much for your help! I'll find the Milton Erickson work as well --... »»

No need for " marks at the beginning. Make long, awkward sentences more manageable... »»

Hi I really loved your draft.....the ideas are really nice. Post it when you are... »»

Kevin, thank you for your valuable notes. »»

EF_Kevin: I also suggest some brevity. Indeed. I'd say you should try revising this so that... »»

Sure, I will not tell you that it was easy because it most definitely was not.... »»

Kevin, Thank you very much! I got two more questions: 1, I really want to... »»