Working for two of the best brands at various levels across two diverse industries helped me acquire skills indispensable, not only for an individual but also for the team an individual is a part off. Teaching at an institute got me in touch with children and people from different strata of society that helped me understand a very different aspect of marketing. Apart from analytical skills, I also enhanced my communication skills appreciably at work.
Working in teams, throughout my professional life, helped me interpret the significance of teamwork. As a team leader and a member, I sharpened my leadership skills considerably and realized how important motivation is for the team to succeed. Understanding team dynamics enabled me to achieve team targets resulting in early promotions. Ability to get along well, with my team and others, equipped me to build a strong network where in I consider myself capable enough to source information from all across the globe.
I, in a way, believe am unique and there is a lot that I can share with the group I work for. I intend to share with my fellow mates the extensive experience I have gained along with the skills and learning acquired
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Good evening :)
As you did not describe what kind of assistance you are seeking, I have made general comments in regards to the piece:
"Working for two of the best brands at various levels across two diverse industries helped me acquire skills indispensable, not only for an individual, but also for the team an individual is a part off. Teaching at an institute got me in touch with children and people from different stratas of society, and that helped me understand a very different aspect of marketing. Apart from analytical skills, I also enhanced my communication skills appreciably at work.
Dear Gloria,
Thanks for your help,
I jsut wanted to know whether the reply is pursuasive enough? I feel as if something is missing though I am unable to figure out how to make it better. There is cap of 150 Words.
Thanks once again,
Sam
Good afternoon :)
This piece is a very well thought out and explained persuasive essay. Good work.
In regards to cutting down the words, how about something like this:
Working for two quality brands at various levels across two diverse industries helped me acquire skills indispensable, not only for an individual, but also for the team an individual is a part off. Teaching at an institute got me in touch with children and people from different stratas of society, and helped me understand very different aspects of marketing. Apart from analytical skills, I enhanced my communication skills appreciably at work.
Working in teams throughout my life helped me interpret the significance of teamwork. As a team leader and member, I sharpened my leadership skills considerably and realized how important motivation is for the team to succeed. Understanding team dynamics enabled me to achieve team targets resulting in early promotions. The ability to get along well with others equipped me to build a strong network where in I consider myself capable enough to source information from all across the globe.
Regards,
Gloria
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