all sorts of techniques in daily
I think this is an accident. It is supposed to say 'technology', I think?
I like the structure, with 'firstly' and 'secondly', etc. That makes it clear. And I like the eloquent sentence here: 'As with everything..'
Today,
the people say we are in the 'digital age' because of our dependence on technology.
Now, let's not put this sentence at the end of the first paragraph:
Anyway is our society too dipendent on technology ? the sentence at the end of the first paragraph becomes the main idea of the paper.
What is the real main idea? Here is the way to find out:
The main idea of the paper = (Firstly,everyone uses all sorts of techniques in daily life.) + (Secondly,technology,especially the internet makes all information easily accessible for society.)
Those 2 sentences comprise your main argument/idea. They share your main message to the reader. So I think you should type one sentence based on those two ideas, and add that sentence to the end of the first paragraph.
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