I have always wanted to be in a position to defend the defenseless; unfortunately I cannot do that physically because of my size. Therefore, I have chosen to advance this interest, intellectually and spiritually.
In 2005, my passion to be an attorney was brought to an abrupt stop by the sudden death of my only brother who was also my sponsor. But I constantly remind myself that delay does not mean denial. As a non United States citizen then, I knew my options were limited and that financially it was going to be very challenging for me to afford to go to law school or more so take care of my basic needs because shortly after his death I was terminated from work same day my employment authorization expired. While I was processing my application to become a United States Citizen, I decided to focus on growing Successful Aging Care Inc- a nonprofit organization I founded to help make older adults aging experience- a success.
The Successful Aging Care Inc has grown to a multimillion dollar organization and I have improved so many lives through provision of comprehensive services needed to make aging experience a success. The name Successful Aging Inc is synonymous with quality elder care. Radio one calls it "the beginning of the rest of your real successful aging experience" and Metro newspaper refers to it as "a one stop shopping for eldercare products and services". Regardless of these remarkable achievements, deep inside me, I know that the services I render to older adults will be enhanced by a more in depth knowledge and understanding of health care law especially as it pertains to the rights, benefits, privileges and protection of assets and persons of the geriatric population.
At the moment, part of my services to older adults is to be their legal guardian. In doing so, I have come to realize that about seventy four wards that I provide guardianship services to, were previously exploited or neglected due to exposure to certain circumstances and lack of awareness on ways to prevent abuse. As I help in prosecuting the perpetrators using the services of attorneys, it becomes more obvious that with the good rapport I have with my client, as an elder law attorney I can directly assist them to effectively resolve their other legal matters and complicated transactions associated with aging. When professional colleagues see my success ratio they often suggest that I go to law school and friends and family say the same thing l when they observe how passionately I care for my wards and other older adults in the Successful Aging network.
A through self evaluation have also showed me that, whenever I am in front of a probate Judge either rendering account of my stewardship or helping to make a determination of the need for involuntary intervention that will promote successful aging experience for my wards, I cannot but foresee how efficient I will be as an eldercare attorney. On one occasion a Judge humorously said that I can make his job easier and save lives if I were an attorney and ask if I have ever considered going to law school. On my way out, one man came to me and said "good job, honestly I thought you were an attorney..."
Anyone familiar with elder care will surely know that it is a vocation for me as evident by the way I care for my clients. Last year at an award luncheon and in the present of about three thousand professionals in elder care, Crotzer-Keystone honored my organization with a direct care worker leadership award, for outstanding contribution to elder care in Delaware County, Pennsylvania. As the cameras were flashing, my wife was shedding tears of joy. She then whispered to me and said "I know it. You were always and will continue to be the one people come to when they need protection, support and comfort. May your children take care of you same way you are taking care of me and others". My former employer, the director of Delaware County Office of Services for the Aging in his speech said " I always know you have a good brain on those shoulders" I can summarily say, that my entire life can be characterized as a life marked with moments of self sacrifices for the sake of making others happy.
As a nontraditional applicant competing with traditional applicants for the same number of seats, I realize that the road is rough as this may be a difficult decision for you to offer me a chance but I know that the destination will be smooth. I have always excelled greatly in academic work. My GPA has always been 3.5 or higher as evidently by my graduate transcript. Unfortunately World Education Services were unable to show this in my foreign undergraduate transcript. In addition I know that my extensive experience and knowledge as an expert in gerontology will surely distinguish me as a good elder law attorney.
I am available for a personal interview should you want to know more about me before you make your final decision. I am optimistic that when you see me and get to understand where am coming from and where I am today, you will believe that law school is the next necessary step for me in my journey already decorated with accomplishments and propelled by ardent desire to continue to promote successful aging experience and reduce family caregivers burden. A cause I will continue to fight for till death and in which I want to be remembered for.
Here are some fixes to start you off:
"In 2005, my passion to be an attorney was brought to an abrupt stop" Did your passion stop, or merely the pursuit of it?
". . . to afford to go to law school or even to take care of my basic needs, because shortly after his death I was terminated from work on the same day that my employment authorization expired." This sentence makes it seem like this was an unfortunate coincidence, but presumably the latter cause the former?
"I decided to focus on growing Successful Aging Care Inc- a nonprofit organization I founded to help make older adults aging experience- into a success."
"In doing this , I have come to realize that about seventy four wards that I provide guardianship services to, were previously exploited or neglected due to exposure to certain circumstances and lack of awareness on ways to prevent abuse." The second half of this sentence is a bit vague. Could you revise to make it more specific?
"When professional colleagues see my success ratio they often suggest that I go to law school, and friends and family say the same thing l when they observe how passionately I care for my wards and other older adults in the Successful Aging network."
I have always wanted to be in a position to defend the defenseless. Unfortunately, I cannot do that physically because of my size. Therefore, I have chosen to pursue the study of law as an endeavor that is both intellectual and spiritual.
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But I constantly remind myself that "delay" does not mean "denial."
I am optimistic that, when you see me and get to understand where am coming from and where I am today, you will believe that law school is the next necessary step for me in my journey -- which is already decorated with accomplishments and propelled by ardent desire. I will continue to promote successful aging experience and reduce the burdens borne by family caregivers, a cause for which I will continue to fight till death and for which I want to be remembered.
This is awesome!! You write very, very well.
