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SOP for MSc IN manufacturing ENGINEERING in UK


pintojocelyn 1 / 1  
Jan 26, 2011   #1
Hi
Please help me out wth my SOP. i dont know if it is good enough.

As a boy I was always spellbound by the contribution of science and technology to our lives and the way they affected our living, which inspired me to take up engineering as my field for graduation. I was always passionate about fast moving cars and gigantic machines and always wanted to know them better. The reason for this was lot of maths and physics came to application. My physics sir, Mr. Kingsley Selveraj was my main motivation. My Physics lecturer (with British Honors) made our classes really interesting and physics seemed to me like never before. He always tried to focus on concepts involved in Physics and its application in every chapter that he taught. . This was the time when I said "this is it! I have figured out, what I want to do ahead in life". This was the time when I started thinking about engineering where physics and maths comes into application. Mechanical engineering was the perfect road for me and this is where my journey began.

My principal, Dr. Joseph Gonsalves has been my lecturer and project guide during my graduation. A true genius in the field of advanced design and manufacturing. My project deals with a device called homogeniser which improves the efficiency and reduces the emission of a 4-stroke petrol engine. The device (homogeniser) was designed by my principal and is a cutting-edge technological invention. I and my group conducted the required tests and did a lot of research which helped me to know this device better and helped me a lot to work as a team.

During my graduation days, I found the modules related to manufacturing very conceptual. The best part of manufacturing is that I could actually visualize everything in it. I began to feel the magic of manufacturing while I was working in the workshop, whether it was working on the lathe or doing foundry and forging work. I slowly started wondering if they could be made faster and better. This developed keen interest in me into subjects like manufacturing processes, quality control, rapid prototyping, computer integrated manufacturing etc. In addition to this, I had also taken up my seminar on robotic welding which gave me an insight on computer integrated manufacturing. I would like to pursue my post-graduation in the specialised manufacturing fields like Computer-Aided Design and Computer-Aided Machining; Manufacturing Processes; Manufacturing Systems; Manufacturing Management; Manufacturing Automation; Manufacturing Metrology and Machine Tool Performance in a committed manner and I am confident of contributing considerably to the growth of this field. The thought of pursuing an MSc in Advanced Manufacturing Technology and Maintenance Engineering at this stage seems to be the most logical next step towards building the blocks for my future endeavors. It also enlivens me to think that the MSc in UK will provide me with International exposure and I believe is a necessity.

I have varied interests and am very devoted to the idea of giving something back to society. This is why I was an active member of the National Social Service and have participated in a Blood Donation Camp and also worked on a tree plantation, in addition to other community services. During my undergraduate studies, I was a member of the Mechanical Engineering Student Association and this gave me a chance to showcase my talents like singing and photography. I feel that participation in these extracurricular activities have also helped me to discover myself and my interests.
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Jan 29, 2011   #2
Let's make it all hypnotizingly plural:
As a boy I was always spellbound by the contributions of science and technology into to our lives and the way it has they affected our living, which inspired me to take up engineering as my field for graduation. ---I just wanted to trim away those unnecessary words. Less is more!

...machines and always wanted to know them better. --This paragraph is very short! Maybe you should add a few more sentences to complete the idea.

Every "body" paragraph should be one idea that is part of the message of the essay. So an essay with five paragraphs, which has 3 body paragraphs, will have one main idea and three sub ideas. That is not really always the best way to write, but try it that way. It is a powerful way to write.

Actually, as I continue to read I see that you write good paragraphs about distinct ideas... so, you are better than I thought!

Right here, this seems like you are not really saying anything:
The scope and depth of the courses coupled with a stirring environment seem to be the right composite for me to do my post-graduation in this univer --You need to tell them something about a connection you have made with the professors or with the text books used or with the school itself... say something to show how your particular interests make this a great school for you. You have to say something meaningful; it is no good to say "scope and depth" and talk vaguely... show them that you have been learning all about their program.

:-)
OP pintojocelyn 1 / 1  
Jan 29, 2011   #3
hey thnx susan
i really dont know abt the last part there. i dont know much abt any universities. all i knw is the fees,ranking and the modules.basically all info from brochure. please tell me what to do?
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Jan 29, 2011   #4
Hey, the topic you and susan are discussing is an important one. Essays are opportunities to demonstrate the extent of your preparedness. One of the characteristics about a very serious, forward looking student with a real plan is this: extensive knowledge about the school.

You can google the names of individual professors. Find them on the website. Make yourself spend 2 hours collecting information about the actual people involved and, if possible, find out what text books are used. That is great advice from Susan, because if you only know stuff from the brochure, you are not researching as much as you can. Do you know what I mean? Go collect info on the people, and see if they wrote any articles that are interesting to you.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 18, 2011   #5
Capitalize here:
This was the time when I said, "This is ...

Keep it in the past tense here:
The best part of manufacturing is was that ...
I think they will be very impressed. Nice use of "magic."
frankiemuniz01 - / 3  
Feb 18, 2011   #6
I also need to know that how can i go to London to get achievement.


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