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Mar 6, 2009, 03:26pm   #1
I am so happy to join the forum. My statement of purpose is attached below. please kindly let me know all types of comments. I could not find the rules for posting names, so I took some of them out. Thank you!

Throughout my life, I have learned that the ultimate happiness is obtained not ‎only by hard work and intelligence, but also by unlimited bravery in pursuing my own ‎dreams. It is my overwhelming desire for learning, invention, and teaching that lead ‎me to continue my education towards a Ph.D. degree.‎

I was born in an educated Persian family with strong social values of hard work. ‎During my childhood my parents always counseled me to study hard and keep my ‎mind disengaged from the existing difficulties. In my opinion, having a solid ‎knowledge of fundamentals was critical to elaborate profound ideas. As a result, I ‎tried hard to build a strong foundation in mathematics and physics during high school ‎years. During my middle and high school, National Organization for Development of ‎Exceptional Talents (NODET) also known as SAMPAD in my country, I honored ‎several times because of high ranking in scientific competitions. The most important ‎of them is National Olympiad of Chemistry in 1999.‎

The enormous numbers of challenges thrown out by rapid development in ‎science and technology have made me choose engineering as a field of study. My ‎formal advanced education started with my undergraduate program in chemical ‎engineering at the College of Chemical Engineering of University of XXX. In my ‎undergraduate years, I have acquired a strong background in the fundamentals of ‎basic chemical engineering subjects like thermodynamics, heat and mass transfer, ‎fluid mechanics, chemical reactions, and process design and economics. My BSc ‎project entitled "XXX" is an industrial project under the ‎direction of professor XXX. During my four successive years of studies, ‎I was ranked first and selected as a "Brilliant Talent Student" in the Chemical ‎Engineering Department. Regarding this achievement, I was honored by Dr. XXX who was the dean of University of XXX at that time. I graduated with a GPA ‎of XXX from 20.0. As is often said, the journey of exploring the realm of knowledge ‎and probing into the unknown is infinite and strenuous. However, to me, the desire to ‎fulfill ambitions and the joy from discoveries prevailed over any sense of hardship. ‎My undergraduate program was as rewarding as it was joyful. ‎

During three months summer internship in XXX Company, I acquainted with the urea and melamine manufacturing processes. As an ‎Industrial Intern, I provided energy and material balance for the melamine plant and ‎evaluated urea consumption and also design shell and tube heat exchangers in the ‎plant and compared results with available data sheets.‎

Subsequent to my undergraduate program, I undertook a Master's program at ‎Department of Chemical Engineering, University of XXX and with it I delved ‎deeper into the fascinating world of chemical engineering and performed some ‎research. Considering the fact that Iran is a country rich in oil and gas reservoirs and ‎the importance of thermodynamics in process modeling, I chose to concentrate on the ‎impact of equations of state on Iranian oil reservoirs. My Msc thesis title was ‎‎"XXX" under ‎supervision of Professor XXX. The main purpose of this dissertation was developing ‎a new hard-sphere cubic equation of state to calculate properties of pure hydrocarbons ‎and their mixtures and vapor-liquid phase equilibrium calculations more accurate than ‎other commonly used two parameter cubic equations of state such as SRK and PR. I ‎am most proud of the fact that my presented equation of state is more accurate than ‎ones used in similar studies to predict the density of saturated liquids. The paper ‎elicited from the results of this research published in journal of XXX. Furthermore, two other papers from this research were presented in 11th XXX of Chemical Engineering (XX) congress in ‎Malaysia and 11th XXX Chemical Engineering congress. I graduated with a GPA of XXX from 20.0.‎

Inspiration and enthusiasm well up in me when I am at work; I have gained ‎professional experience by working about two years as a process engineer at XXX Company in Iran. During this period I become completely familiar with ‎gas industry from production to distribution by participating in industrial training ‎classes and providing technical proposals for different processes such as amine gas ‎sweetening, TEG gas dehydration, sulphur recovery, and ethane recovery. In addition, ‎here I have learned how to work under time constraints, how to visualize abstract ‎concepts, and apply concepts to industrial projects in real time. Having real work ‎experiences, now I have a balanced view of my interests, potential contributions and ‎priorities, which enables me to make a decision between pursuing a career in the ‎industry or one in academia. I find the academic environment more appealing because ‎of the high level of intellectual challenge and creativity associated with it as well as ‎the opportunity it provides to follow my research interests in the field of chemical ‎engineering.‎

I plan to continue my education to Ph.D. level in an internationally reputable ‎and high-ranking research university. In order to find the appropriate graduate ‎program which can fulfill my educational goals and best match my research interests, ‎I have perused different sources, and I have found the Ph.D. program at University of ‎XXX and Dr. XXX's research group well suited to my interests. I have full ‎confidence that my diligence, dedication, and genuine interest in learning coupled ‎with the exceptional guidance I can receive in University of XXX will allow me to ‎contribute to my fields of interest. I would greatly enjoy and appreciate the ‎opportunity to do so at your institution. ‎

XXX
Department of Chemical Engineering
University of XXX

Right here, I think you should use a period instead of a semi-colon:

Inspiration and enthusiasm well up in me when I am at work. I have gained...

I think you should add one or two sentences to the first paragraph to tell more specifically what you intend to do. For example:

It is my overwhelming desire for learning, invention, and teaching that lead ‎me to continue my education towards a Ph.D. degree.‎ Specifically, I hope to contribute [talk about specific aspirations for both the program for which you are applying AND your future career.

These specifics at the start will add great substance to the essay.

I also think you should add specifics about how you will contribute to and be benefited by the program for which you are applying. At the end, when you write ...and I have found the Ph.D. program at University of ‎XXX and Dr. XXX's research group well suited to my interests. , follow up on that by adding a sentence that tells why you chose this program rather than a different one, why you want to work with Dr. XXX, and, you know, specifically why you choose this school over other schools. That will show that you have a well-conceived plan, and that you are serious. Then, continue: I have full ‎confidence that my...


Most importantly, I want to tell you that this essay is BRILLIANT, and that I am sure that it will make a good impression. It is pleasant to read, even though I do not know you had have no interest in your field. You write very, very well, and I am impressed. That you for contributing this excellent essay for the benefit of others who may visit this forum for ideas about how to write an excellent essay.
Mar 7, 2009, 05:18pm   #3
Thank you so much for your useful comments. referring to your notes, I add some sentences to the essay. I would be appreciate to know your idea.
thank yo again for your consideration.

It is my overwhelming desire for learning, invention, and teaching that lead ‎me to continue my education towards a Ph.D. degree.‎ I hope to contribute positively to future improvements in the field of thermodynamics and phase equilibria to modify process modeling that is a key rule enabling technology for process development and design. This also is what I believe will help me to become a successful pioneer.

I have found the Ph.D. program at University of ‎XXX and Dr. XXX's research group well suited to my interests. Dr. XXX is recognised world-wide as an authority in applied thermodynamics and created a new concept in chemical engineering by blending thermodynamics,databases and distillation synthesis. In addition, the university of XXX is a comprhensive research university, ranked one of Canada's top seven research universities. I have full ‎confidence that my...

thank yo again for your consideration.
It is my overwhelming desire to learn, innovate, and teach that compels me to continue my education towards a Ph.D. degree.‎

I gave a correction for that sentence, but I don't know if I like it.... can you be "overwhelmed" by a desire to "innovate, learn, and teach"? It seems that you are expressing passion for these three things... but instead of asserting passion for those things, you should SHOW it through examples... not just saying it. I don't lie that sentence...


I hope to contribute positively to future improvements in the field of thermodynamics and phase equilibria to modify process modeling, which is a key rule enabling technology for process development and design.

Um... what is a key rule enabling technology for process development and design? Process modeling is the key? The sentence seems wrong, but I don't know! I don't know what those words mean!! :) Have someone check it, someone who knows about this weird science!! :)


This also is what I believe will help me to become a successful pioneer.

The unique environment and resources at (name of this university to which you are applying) is what I believe will help me to become a successful pioneer.

I have found the Ph.D. program at University of ‎XXX and Dr. XXX's research group well suited to my interests. Dr. XXX is recognised world-wide as an authority in applied thermodynamics and created a new concept in chemical engineering by blending thermodynamics,databases and distillation synthesis. In addition, the university of XXX is a comprehensive research university, ranked one of Canada's top seven research universities. I have full ‎confidence that my...

It is great that you work so hard at this essay. You will be very successful as a scientist, because of your thoroughness and sincerity!



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