I remember feeling as if my future was a blank canvas and I was
given the opportunity to paint it however I wanted
Great sentence here...
The problem was that I had...
With just a couple of years of studies left before I would earn my degree, the...
Use action verbs:
... and be able to make a significant impact on...
Great job!! do you have room to write more before you reach the word limit? I think you should give at least one paragraph to share your philosophy of medicine -- google that term to find great articles, and read them for inspiration. At the end of the essay, it would be great to expound your personal philosophy and perhaps some of the areas of specialization that appeal to you. Read a lot, and then write a few great sentences to share your unique ideas.