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I am interested to apply for a Master's Degree Program in ABC starting in 2011. I graduated in 2008, from the University of 123, India and hold a Bachelors degree in ----Engineering
The four year undergraduate program in Electronics engineering formed the basis of my perseverance towards achieving an in-depth knowledge in the field of --. As a part of my degree course I studied various subjects relating to diverse aspects of Electronics which includes ----.
In my second year of bachelor's degree, I underwent the experience of developing a --. Under the guidance of Prof. ---, I along with my friend prepared the circuit that was able to display desirable features and given parameters. While submitting the assignment, our lecturer observed us with a grin while watching the circuit mounted on a big Printed Circuit Board (PCB). His remarks - "You made a good model, but it is big in size. This is an era of nanotechnology. The miniaturized circuits have replaced the antiquated and gigantic circuits" - left an indelible impression about this futuristic field in my mind.
I happened to have a real rendezvous with -- during final year of my under graduation, while I had gone to participate in a national level paper presentation competition. A paper presented on this topic in the function struck an instant chord with me. In the same semester, I was fortunate enough to be a part of a many more paper presentations at college level, where many papers emphasized on ---. I began to realize that this domain had indeed a lot of practical applications that an electronics engineer would feel proud to use in day-to-day life.
The wide applications of this capricious field introduced me to plethora of opportunities for discovering the inner wells of knowledge that this had to offer and which, consequently, led me to decide on furthering my studies.
I want to carry forward my penchant for ---, as this technology is gaining increasing importance, in all aspects and is having significant impact on almost all industries and all areas of society. There is an ample scope to prove one's ability, competence and intelligence in this revolutionary and potentially very beneficial technology.
My insatiable hunger for exploring new avenues in the field of engineering and the unrelenting efforts towards discovering the hitherto unknown facets of electronics encouraged me to venture into research and development exercises. In my final year, I undertook a project entitled --" in "---Limited". Previously, the testing methodologies that had been conducted manually were time- consuming and involved perilous risks. Our objective was to improve the speedy aspects of manufacturing and delivery of starters, which was successfully accomplished.
This project has given me a great exposure in the field of automation. These experiences were invaluable for me since I learned the serviceability and functionality of various real world applications. Unlike the milieu of the college, the corporate environment was very much different. The concept of learning, accountability for the work at hand gave me a greater focus. The most challenging aspect however was the rate of the learning, which was immense.
In the final year of my engineering studies I was introduced to the subject of --. The first session in the labs was devoted to developing simple programs in -- software using different modeling techniques. A combination of different gates used to build various blocks generating complete control circuits for various computations fascinated me. I got to interact with Prof. ---, a professor of great repute in the field of VLSI design. He introduced me to the synergies of very large scale integration techniques. Under his guidance I was able to top in this subject in the college.
Besides the college academics I was actively involved in the extra-curricular activities. The driving force behind all this was my aim to develop all the facets of my personality. In this process I could not achieve the grades I wanted to, in the first and second year. But soon I garnered the skill of judicious allocation of time and energy. I did well in the third year and final year of Engineering. Moreover I do not feel that the marks I scored are the sole indicators of my understanding of the subject. A cogent reason to augment my belief is the final year of my engineering, where with strong focus and hard work, I excelled in my graduation with distinction. Considering my excellent record, my college offered me for a job as a lecturer.
Also for the past twenty months I have been working as a --- in --- department of ----. My work has helped me develop a thorough insight into return to the academic world for further growth. It has given me the confidence to pursue a Master's degree and also kindled a desire to do research.This career with open prospects has given me constant incentive to improve myself and to gain more knowledge.
Today as a __-year-old individual I perceive that life for me has been a process of conscious evolution. An integral part of this growth has been the value system imbibed in me by my parents, teachers and mentors and an immense liking for science. As I embark upon a new stage of my life, I believe that a postgraduate study will provide a milestone in my career along with invaluable experiences that will allow me to become a successful, innovative professional and assist in accomplishing my goals. Ten years from now, I envisage myself as a full-fledged research professional in an organization, or a faculty member at some leading university.
My decision to pursue graduate studies in the United Kingdom is underscored by my desire to be a part of the graduate program at your institution. The pioneering works going on at the ----department labs, which include the development of ---, perfectly match with the field of my interest. The interdisciplinary nature of --- has convinced me in taking this decision as it is the ideal choice for an exciting research career. At the same time, I am confident of contributing originally to the ongoing work at your department. By working under the guidance of distinguished faculty, I shall certainly be able to exploit my potential to the fullest.
The department web site revealed very strong faculty like Prof. ---- involved in extensive research in the area of --- engineering. This has strengthened my resolve to study at University of ---. I am confident that the erudite faculty will make my learning experience extraordinary. If I get the opportunity to be a part of that intellectually stimulating environment, I am sure my talents will be put to optimal use.
I am confident that overall opportunity to study in Europe will broaden my horizons and give me an opportunity to gain world class education and help me become an excellent world citizen.
I would therefore, feel obliged to be able to secure admission in your prestigious university with full financial assistance and pursue my M.S. program. I am sure that I will match all the credentials and will be able to maintain high standards at your university.