Hi everyone , I am applying for MS in Technology Management. This is my first SOP in my life... plzzz help me by evaluating it.
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Increasingly, technological organizations rely for their success on individuals who can successfully manage technical teams. Managers must learn to understand the technology context in which decisions are made, whilst engineers increasingly need a range of management skills. The 'communication gap' between engineers and managers must be closed if they are to work effectively together as team members with a common goal. Thus, my future career goal is to be a technical manager in leading software development company and manage complex technical projects.
"Given the date of birth as input, the program should tell which day of the week one is born", was the first experiment done by me in my first year as Under-Graduate using C++, the result of which gave me recognition in a class of 60 members. This initiated my interest for research in Software Development. I had always fancied the way Computer games worked since childhood; I was always trying to know how these games were designed. When I was in high school, I came across the book "Out of Their Minds: the lives and discoveries of 15 great computer scientists". The works of Edsger W.Dijkstra and Donald E. Knuth have inspired me a lot. I was very much driven by this book to take Computer Science as a major in my future studies.
I completed my 10th from ABC School, Hyderabad. I scored 97/100 in mathematics in 10th which was the highest in my school. I chose Mathematics, Physics and Chemistry as specialization in high school at XYZ Junior College. High school subjects have developed my logical thinking capability. After high school, I competed with over 160000 students in Engineering Entrance Examination and got a rank of 1022. As a result, I got admission into one of the prestigious institutions in India for Engineering, ABC College, Hyderabad in the Computer Science and Engineering stream.
During my first year as a freshman, I had spent a lot of my free time in computer labs. I became a member of "Head Start" committee, a yearly college technical symposium in my first year, which was really an achievement as the committee usually allows only students who are atleast sophomores. In my 2nd year, I had the most unfortunate incident which left me with a broken arm. I underwent surgery and it took me eight months for complete recovery. This degraded my grades a bit. The final semester of my bachelor's degree was really interesting as I got a chance to do the course project. Per my professor, I did excellent, and received the top score in my class with 48/50 marks.
In the final semester during the project work, we had campus placements. Considering my course project performance and my analytical ability "XY Information Solutions Ltd", offered me a position for Software Engineer. At XY Information Solutions , I started my corporate career with technical excellence in Microsoft .Net technologies. I was involved in the software development for the XY BPO project, which was aimed to increase the revenue by 2%. I worked for XY for 19 months and then I got an opportunity to work for "ABC India Pvt.Ltd", the Indian IT development center for the Fortune nth company "ABC Communications Inc.". As a part of the product design and development , I have been working for the ABC's critical online ordering project "ABC" for 3.5 years now.
In this period, I have earned very good technical knowledge and was promoted twice, as a Software Engineer to a Senior Analyst. Proving my technical ability I have done Microsoft certification for .NET Framework 2.0 - Web-Based Client Development and .NET Framework - Application Development Foundation. In the year 2010, I was one of the invitees to Verizon Communications, Texas, USA for three months to acquire knowledge on the Redesign project and the transfer the same to the Indian development Team. I was one of the leads for this project to handle a module called "Moves" end to end. For this work, I was opted as Release Champion for five consecutive releases and awarded with two SPOT awards.
During this period, as a Release Champion I was directly accountable for all the deliverables of the project. It was evident that a perfect blend of technical knowledge and business intelligence is required to achieve greater milestones in the industry. I observed that the key to building successful information systems involved correct understanding and analysis of information and effectively communicate the relevant technological and business objectives. This is where I realized the importance of a management degree for a successful career growth.
After having done a research on my various options, studying your website, and consulting my supervisors, I find that the masters in Technology Management course at your university has modules which are well balanced in leveraging my existing knowledge and experience. I would consider it as a privilege to be a part of your esteemed institution where I would be exposed to a diverse professional atmosphere within the student community. This will help me immensely to understand global business trends, cultures and challenge me to excel in my career path. I sincerely hope that my application will be given thoughtful consideration.
Hello RamD,
Overall i would say good writing, very good sequencing of achievements and good build up. Your Essay was engaging. However there were so grammatical errors, and sentences i didn't quite agree with. i will treat them one by one. My corrections or suggestions will be in ( ) am new and don't know how to use the tools yet.
Increasingly, technological organizations rely for their success on individuals who can successfully manage technical teams.
(Increasingly, technological organization rely ON the success OF individuals who can successfully manage technical teams)
Whilst engineers increasingly need a range of management skills
(While engineers increasing need a range of managerial skills)
The 'communication gap' between engineers and managers must be closed if they are to work effectively together as team members with a common goal.
(The 'communication gap' between engineers and managers must be closed if they are to work effectively together in a team driven by a common goal.)
Thus, my future career goal is to be a technical manager in leading software Development Company and manage complex technical projects.
( In view of the foregoing, My career goal is to be a technical manager in a leading software development company, with the ability to manage complex technical projects.)
The body of your essay is quite good, you provided necessary information, but the use of "during this period" repeatedly doesn't seat quite well. Find alternative words that are more appropriate. Maybe "while working for ABC Company, i took courses that greatly improved my technical knowledge, as a result of this i was promoted twice."
(During this period, canceled) (As a Release Champion I was directly accountable for all the deliverables of the project...)
You need a few commas here and there. Your closing statement doesn't compliment the body of your Essay, it is too weak. Look into this.
Good luck
That first paragraph... I don't know how I feel about it. I think it is well written, but the point you are making is rather obvious. I think it is worth a single sentence, not a whole paragraph. I guess I think that paragraph should be condensed into a single sentence about the importance of closing that gap. Everyone already knows the importance of technical management & projects.
Don't say DONE BY ME. Do it this way:
...was the first experiment I completed in my first year as an undergraduate using...
During my first year as a freshman, I had spent
In this period, I have earned very good technical knowledge and was promoted...
After having done a research on my various options, studying your website, and consulting my supervisors, I find that ..--Oh, very good. I think this is going to be a successful essay!
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