I got a scholarship to study a Masters in Petroleum Engineering by the Higher Committee For Education Development in Iraq (HCED). Due to the developments of modern technology and progress in all areas of life, I want to continue my studies to get a master's degree. I have chosen to study in the United States, because their education systems one of the best lush systems in the world which enables the student to gain experience and work with the best minds in the field of research subjects , where famous universities in the United States of America published a tremendous amount of research each year.
I have already been awarded a scholarship to pursue a Masters degree in Petroleum Engineering by the Higher Committee for Education Development in Iraq (HCED). My preferred destination obviously is the United States which provides the best opportunities to learn developments of modern technology together with a great learning experience and research facilities.As U.S.A universities are characterized by a good reputation and international fame and are considered as the standard for quality and academic excellence and USA the first country in the petroleum industry and have many advanced schools in this area .
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I view this US experience is something that is not confined to providing me with a great learning experience and wider knowledge in my field. It would also generate great networking opportunities for me and provide me with insights to broaden my perspectives that would benefit me both personally and professionally.I hope to communicate between my job with North Oil Company and my academic study in master . After my graduation I worked as a Petroleum Engineer until now in the North Oil Company \ Ministry of Oil in Iraq .My hope is that your consideration of my file will render a favorable decision. I am confident a decision like that will definitely change my life and put me on the verge of a bright future of which I hope your school will be the main thrust.
This needs improvement... but I prefer if you give a bit more details for me about your experience so that I can re-draft it :)