I graduated with a 3.71GPA from Universitas Atma Jaya Yogyakarta, Indonesia

Motivation letter for master's course civil engineering and management University of Twente

Dear all

This is my draft of my motivation letter, I am not a native English speaker. Please give some comments or suggestions to me.
Best Regards

I am applying for the Master of Science program in Civil Engineering and Management with the specialization of Construction Process and Management at University of Twente for the fall semester 2015. Admission into this Masters program would be a solid step towards my goal of being an entrepreneur in construction industry and development.

I graduated with a 3.71 GPA from Universitas Atma Jaya Yogyakarta, Indonesia. I have acquired a strong background in mathematics and mechanics, which form the core for the majority of engineering courses through my study of civil engineering. I was honored to finish my bachelor degree with the citation excellent.

My first exposure to entrepreneurship in construction industry and development was through cost and time management and engineering entrepreneurship course as a part of my bachelor degree. I was impressed how construction management could give me new insights in planning, designing, organizing and realizing of huge construction project on time and on budget involving numerous people and their roles. This area of study inspired my on site practice in the construction project of Hotel Tentrem in Yogyakarta.

Aside from my academic background, this area of interest to me through my involvement in my family business of real estate and property. Realizing that residential sector demand is rocketing in Indonesia, my father and I have decided to run real estate and property business since 2014. I play the role in managing the whole construction process and the legalization while my father tackles on the marketing. These business has given me a new insight into the importance of social impact in providing new jobs and economic uplifting of society in my city. In the future, I plan to expand this business into bigger and more complex construction work. However, through my practical work experience, I am fully aware of the fact that my study and research lacks depth. Thus, it stimulates me to learn and explore more knowledge in technical and non-technical aspects of construction work.

I have chosen University of Twente because it offers multidisciplinary approach to the technical and non-technical aspects of construction project. Also, it provides a project and process management course that will support my knowledge and bring me a stronger sense in applying practical skills to the real construction business. This program will give me ample opportunity to grasp and apply one of your approaches to my research interest in "adoption of innovation in the residential construction industry". I would like to investigate further the implementation strategies of the adoption potential of innovations in the residential sector in Indonesia as it is influenced by many and complex non-technical factors. Above all, University of Twente has an outstanding academic reputation worldwide and been lauded as the most entrepreneurial university in the Netherlands. I wish to take my practical and theoretical skills about construction management both technical and non-technical aspects to a higher level in University of Twente and I am excited with the opportunity working with other students from different culture.

The Master of Science program in Civil Engineering and Management offered by University of Twente will help me to realize my ambition to further develop theoretical and practical skills also innovation regarding to construction process management in depth once I return to Indonesia. As a self-determined and self-motivated person, I am confident that I will meet your expectations as a suitable candidate for this program because of both my outstanding academic and work experience background.

You have good reasons for applying to this degree, that's very appreciated by universities. :)
You language is in some places a bit too sophisticated - you have used thesaurus, haven't you? ;) Because of this essay is difficult to read.

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Good luck with your application!

PS. I know that this kind of wroting may be actually natural for you - anyway, you should think about the person who will read this and make is as easy and pleasant to read as possible.