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applying to MA in Comm. Sci. and Disorders with BA in Linguistics + teaching exp.


lauren88 1 / 3  
Jan 10, 2011   #1
Thanks in advance for taking the time to read this! I will be eternally grateful!

I'm applying to a M.A. program in CSD.

My early college years were spent assessing which career best suited my strengths, interests, and personal goals. There were four classes that were to have a lasting impact on my career choice. They are Introduction to Linguistics, Anatomy and Physiology of the Speech, Hearing, and Language Mechanisms, Speech Science, and Survey of Adult Neurogenic Disorders. All of these classes widened my understanding of the field of speech-language pathology, further stimulated my interest, and strengthened my resolve to become a speech-language pathologist (SLP). However, the experience that was to permanently change my academic trajectory from English to Communication Sciences and Disorders ocurred prior to my attendence of these courses.

After my first full semester at the University XXX, I got in a car accident. From the accident, I sustained a broken left tibia, substantial damage to both ankles leaving me unable to walk, and I suffered a mild traumatic brain injury (MTBI) which would manifest itself approximately six months after the incident. Though, a lot of damage had been inflicted in a split second, the negative effects (both physical and cognitive) were not to leave the deepest impact on me.

To this day, I still have a profound feeling of appreciation for all of the healthcare professionals that came to my aid that morning. From the Emergency Medical Technicians who stabilized me and shuttled me to the XXX Emergency Department to the doctor who surgically placed two screws in my left ankle so that it would heal appropriately. These are the people who have changed me. These are the people who have motivated me to take my love of language and channel it into the healing of others. It was their compassion that can now be identified, without doubt, as the impetus of my career goals.

The academic semesters of fall of 2003 and spring of 2004, I made very little tangible academic progress, but my diligence and devotion to not throwing in the towel paid dividends in my overall cognitive recovery. The constant challenge of performing in my classes kept me mentally engaged. Though, I struggled with bouts of anxiety, panic attacks, and general confusion the end result was worth the while. I had completed my first full semester since the car accident and, more importantly, the success gave me the confidence that I was going to make a full recovery.

I was working part-time at XXX as a teaching assistant and going to school full-time. This was to be the first semester that I was to find myself on the Dean's honor list. My experiences as a security officer at XXX hospital have also been instrumental in strengthening my resolve in becoming a SLP. I take great pride in giving my coworkers, our patients, and visitors accurate and useful information. Having worked with and successfully managed nervous expectant fathers, families in mourning over the loss of a loved one and the occasional inappropriate visitor and/or patient has given me a great deal of confidence when confronted with the tough situations that sometimes crop up during daily hospital operations.

I am particularly interested in working with patients with aphasia. The impact of living in a world that does not understand your impairment can be frustrating and a daunting task. Consider how an individual would feel if their family, friends, or doctors did not understand or were not even empathetic to daily struggles brought on by an acquired language disorder such as Aphasia. I seek to shed new light on aphasia by creating an instant message client which emulates the effects of aphasia. Aphasia usually results from lesions to the language-relevant areas of the frontal, temporal and parietal lobes of the brain, such as Broca's area, Wernicke's area, and the neural pathways between them. These areas are almost always located in the left hemisphere, and in most people this is where the ability to produce and comprehend language is found.

However, in a very small number of people, language ability is found in the right hemisphere. In either case, damage to these language areas can be caused by a stroke, traumatic brain injury, or other brain injury. Aphasia may also develop slowly, as in the case of a brain tumor or progressive neurological disease, e.g., Alzheimer's or Parkinson's disease. It may also be caused by a sudden hemorrhagic event within the brain. Certain chronic neurological disorders, such as epilepsy or migraine, can also include transient aphasia as a prodromal or episodic symptom.

I have decided to pursue graduate school at Univesity XXX since a.) I know the faculty and staff in the Communication Sciences and Disorders Department are top notch, b.) there is a medical tract for those who lean more towards this facet of speech-language pathology, and c.) I am overjoyed by the possibility that I might receive an externship at the VA hospital, a position I feel my unique background and interests are particularly suited for. Both Professor XXX and Dr. XXX have mentioned this opportunity to me, knowing my interests. I would love nothing more than to help them to attain the wholeness that I now feel largely due to the hard work and compassion of healthcare professionals.
tkkt1 11 / 47  
Jan 10, 2011   #2
Grammatically your essay is fine as it should be since you're interested in linguistics. Your essay includes the semantics and grammar, but maybe you should expand and include that you would also like to explore the pragmatics of language too (perhaps broadening your horizons?).

I would greatly appreciate it if you took a look at my essay.
OP lauren88 1 / 3  
Jan 10, 2011   #3
Thanks! I left comments on your essay.

I'm actually not applying for a program in linguistics... It's for communication sciences and disorders. And I don't think I mentioned semantics and grammar in my statement...

What do you think of the content though?
m888 1 / 1  
Jan 10, 2011   #4
Hi! Thanks so much for your comments!

My teaching experience offers me insight on understanding the needs of various types of children. (I THINK YOU SHOULD CLARIFY THE NEEDS...ARE YOU TALKING ABOUT GENERAL NEEDS OR LANGUAGE NEEDS?!)

I was able to apply what I learned in my linguistics courses to teach my students how to pronounce sounds that do not exist in the English language, explaining the place and manner of articulation, vowel qualities, and tonal contours. (THIS SENTENCE SOUNDS A LITTLE LONG...MAYBE YOU SHOULD BREAK IT UP...I WAS ABLE TO APPLY WHAT I LEARNED IN MY LING. COURSES TO TEACH MY STUDENTS HOW TO PRONOUNCE SOUNDS THAT DO NOT EXIST IN THE ENGLISH LANGUAGE. I EXPLAINED THE PLACE AND MANNER OF ARTICULATION OF SOUNDS AS WELL AS VOWEL QUALITIES AND TONAL CONTOURS.)

...communication norms of different cultureS

In summer 2008 (IN THE SUMMER OF 2008..)

...each type of students (EACH TYPE OF STUDENTS not STUDENT!)

The size of your CSD department...( I WOULDN'T SAY YOUR... I WOULD SAY THE NAME OF THE SCHOOL)

I like how you included specifically what you want to study and research...I would maybe expand the 2nd page

but this looks great! Good Luck with everything!
Jc303 - / 2  
Jan 11, 2011   #5
I just saw this exact same post on Livejournal last week.
OP lauren88 1 / 3  
Jan 11, 2011   #6
Yes, I also posted it on Livejournal. Did you leave any comments there?
Jc303 - / 2  
Jan 12, 2011   #7
Well I thought your not allowed to double-post your essays that have already been posted somewhere else.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Mar 12, 2011   #8
My early college years were spent assessing which career best suited my strengths, interests, and personal goals.

Hi Lauren, google around about active voice and passive voice in writing. You'll learn how to switch this to the active voice, and it'll be better.

I sustained a broken left tibia, substantial damage to both ankles

Oh, no! That must have hurt so much!!!!

my diligence and devotion to not throwing in the towel---It was not devotion to not throwing in the towel... I think these words are a little too abstract. You should just specify what motivated you to persevere. But don't say devotion to not throwing in the towel.

Here is another part that may lack meaning:
I know the faculty and staff in the Communication Sciences and Disorders Department are top notch...----Every university says their faculty is top notch. It will be great if you can replace this sentence with one about a particular professor whose articles or books you have read.

:-)


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