Could you give me the idea of thesis statement about Othello?

i'm writing litertary analysis about Othello by William shakespeare. and i wrote the thesis, how was is it? pls help meeh.

As Mongolian proverb which means "if you will follow someone who is good mood, you will be the light of the moon; if you will follow someone who is bad mood, you will be the poisoning of the snake", Othello is followed and trusted Iago who is an evil, and he ruins his great life by himself.

and i translated mongolian proverbs by my self, so there is might be so many mistakes. one more proverb:
As Mongolian proverb which means "if you didn't erected the hill, by where can sit the jay bird, Othello isn't provoke Iago, he couldn't be confronted his tragedy.

could you check it too? tnk u :)

Greetings, BBgirl!

Unfortunately, I think the proverbs lost quite a bit in the translation; the second one is particularly difficult to understand. However, I think we can do some good with the first one. I might rewrite your thesis this way:

As a Mongolian proverb says, "if you will follow someone who is good-natured, you will be the light of the moon; if you will follow someone who is bad, you will be the poison of the snake." Othello followed and trusted Iago who is an evil man, and in so doing, he brought ruin on his own life.

I hope this helps!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com

thank u.
i know that second one is hard to translate, i try to say that somebody build the hill, and then the bird jay sit on the hill, if there wasn't any hill how can sit on the hill birds? or if you didn't build the hill, how can sit on the hill jay birds.

Greetings!

Okay, I think I get it now! In order for the jay birds to sit on the hill, you must first erect the hill. It makes me think of that famous line from the movie, "Field of Dreams": "If you build it, they will come." It refers to a type of cause and effect.

Thanks for the explanation!

Sarah, EssayForum.com