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To obtain MBA as starting point for reuniting my business experience and engineering background, then establishing my career in marketing field in a multinational electronic company such as Samsung.

Obtaining an MBA as a starting point for reuniting my business experience and engineering background will then establish my career in the marketing field in multinational electronic companies such as Samsung.

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Grammatically, as it is this statement is a fragment. I suggest:

Obtaining an MBA will be a starting point to unite my business experience with my engineering background in order to establish a career in the marketing field, expressly in the business setting of a multinational electronic company such as Samsung.

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