Sourav90 and rikacollege91, I think you misunderstood the title of this thread - and thought that moderators would read your posts. To get their comments, you will need to start a new thread.
In any case, I glanced over your essays and here is my feedback: Sourav90 - your essay is very much "motherhood" i.e. you praise the school and write correctly. But I am not sure if this is compelling enough or distinguishes you as someone OSU cannot turn away (a have-to-admit.) Add more specifics about what convinced (you) that OSU with it's vast resources and research facilities in the field of finance and an excellent faculty
rika - the meat of your essay is in paragraph 3. You can skip the preface and get into the specifics of what you wanted to do in the uni's rikacollege91: Journalism and Sociology as degree programs.
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