What does that even mean!? It's okay for someone, like me, to recognize that he has a poor sense of direction, for example, but with writing, how can you say your skills are not good? We come up with words differently on different days. Also, our writing seems different to different people on different days.
Well said Kevin. It's just that my personal experience with essays, and any writing in particular has always been something I've struggled with.
I visited with my professor again today, and I'm going to keep this as a preliminary thesis statement for now and rework it as I continue to the develop the body of my essay.
Perhaps I'll update this thread with the updated version in due time.