Struggling with my virtue ethics paper

I'm not sure if this is the right place to post for help, but here goes.

I am a terrible writer, and an even worse ethicist. That being said, my ethics professor has assigned a paper where I have to choose a cardinal virtue from Thomas Aquinas's writings and then define the virtue in my own words. I have to discuss the communities of which I am involved in, and devise a strategy to introduce this virtue into the community, explaining how I would go about it, and what I predict the results will be. I have already compiled most of the body and conclusion of the paper, my problem is writing a thesis statement. This professor is extremely picky about the structure and wording of the thesis and conclusion paragraph. Any help or advice on how to best go about writing the thesis would be much appreciated. If I need to post anything from my paper so that you can get a better advise me on the thesis, please reply and I will promptly have it posted. Thanks in advance.

Post the paper maybe we can help you pick the thesis out of what you have written.

John

Hi Jason! I bet we can help! Thanks for participating. Try to get yourself fired up about the virtue and the group, and go for it. Get inspired, and write a sentence that is really worth something. Write a thesis sentence that spills your guts and tells about a virtue that really should be cultivated.

About the structure, try my formula:

Grab the attention by saying something unexpected in the first sentence of the first para.

Write a powerful thesis sentence at the end of the first para.

Write body paragraphs full of thick, beefy, ideas and sensory words, describing the implementation of the virtue.

The conclusion paragraph should reflect on the thesis. It should leave the reader with something "extra," an extra idea. See my comments about thesis statements here: http://www.essayforum.com/11_5994_0.html

It would help if you posted what you have come up with already. Beyond that, your thesis statement is essentially what you plan to argue, so it would presumably look at lot like this: "The virtue of _____, which can be described as _____, would best be introduced to _____ by ____." You'd just fill in the blanks with information taken from the body of your essay.

Sorry guys, I think I posted here too late, haha. The paper was due this afternoon, so it has been submitted. Im really sorry about that. Next time I post here I will be sure to allow more time. Again, really sorry about my procrastination.

It normally takes a couple of days for a fair amount of feedback to come in, and it can take considerably longer to fully take advantage of the forums if you find you need to do several sets of revisions. Oh well: at least you know for next time. Hope your essay is well-received by whoever is grading it.