Paper on Philosophy, is this a good thesis? Or even a thesis at all...?

du_mottinThreads: 1 Posts: 2 Author: Eduardo Mottin	Mar 16, 2012, 05:01pm #1
I'm writing a 3k Philosophy paper on epistemology, about justification. Could someone please tell me if this is a good thesis, or what I can do to make it better? "In this paper I will show that the justification component of the traditional tripartite theory is insufficient to accurately establish knowledge. To demonstrate this, I will make use of Gettier examples, and show where the traditional use of justification fails to serve as a true indicator of knowledge, or lack of it. Finally, I will propose a revised view of what I think would fit better to serve as justification on the tripartite model." I'm not if it even is a thesis, i've never been good at writing these...

chalumeau	Mar 17, 2012, 10:21am #2
Replacement (Adjustment?) of the justification component of the traditional tripartite theory with __________ , on the basis of Gettier-style analysis, establishes a more sufficient indicator of epistemological knowledge. Sounds very technical.

du_mottinThreads: 1 Posts: 2 Author: Eduardo Mottin	Mar 17, 2012, 01:49pm #3
Is this better: The traditional understanding of the justification component in the tripartite theory is unreliable to accurately establish cases of knowledge, as observed in Gettier style examples. With the use of these very examples, and of what other philosophers have said about justifying beliefs, I intend to show that the flaw in the current view of justification is that beliefs are often based and justified upon assumptions and uncertain conditions. I will show that by adjusting the view of justification so that it can only be derived from known beliefs and not assumptions, or if the weight of these assumptions is carried through the process of justifying beliefs, we can establish a more sufficient indicator of epistemological knowledge.

chalumeau	Mar 17, 2012, 09:00pm #4
It sounds like a thesis. You have surpassed my capabilities with this one. Grammar tips: ---I usually don't use "I" and "we" in the same sentence. -- "Only" seemed to be in the wrong spot, so I moved it. I have a hard time with "only." My understanding is that in the original sentence the "only" indicates that justification is dependent on derivation as opposed to summarization or symbolism or epiphany. But, you meant to emphasize the "known beliefs" part. "By adjusting the view of justification so that it be derived only from known beliefs and not assumptions, or if the weight of these assumptions be carried through the process of justifying beliefs, I establish a more sufficient indicator of epistemological knowledge." If you wish, I'll read a few abstracts from a journal of your choice. That way I'll get a feel for the writing style preferred in your field.