As a struggling high school student I know what its like to have people doubt your capabilities. It is those same people that keep me motivated to achieve my wildest dreams. My ambition helps me set my goals and it is my determination that helps me accomplish them. All those setbacks in between make me stronger therefore making me into a better person. My name is Olivia Aguilar, I am 16 years old and these qualities are what make me.
Maybe you can use a very specific things happened to you to grab reader's attention, but not say what you think you are...IT is my idea...
As a struggling high school student I know what it's like to have people doubt your capabilities. It is those same people that keep me motivated to achieve my wildest dreams. My ambition helps me set my goals and it is my determination that helps me accomplish them. All those setbacks in between make me stronger therefore making me into a better person. My name is Olivia Aguilar, I am 16 years old and these qualities are what make me.
Further elaborate. For instance, what goals? But other than that, it is simple, yet it goes straight to the point! Which is hard to do.
I see that your message to the reader is that the people who doubted your potential also motivated you.
Is that really the message you want to convey?
I think you should share an insight. Do you remember an event that made you suddenly feel very confident and motivated about college? Write about a key event, a profound experience.
If you are introducing yourself, you get to choose a particular idea to offer the reader -- an idea to associate with you. Let's not have it be "struggling student." Let's have it be something cool!
Olivia,
You have the makings of an excellent essay! Now, take your ideas and put them on paper, but use your personal experiences to strengthen your essay. You say what motivated you in the past and what motivates you now, so use some sort of personal experience to describe that to your readers. Stating what motivates you is one thing, but describing how a specific situation motivated you in the past is a much more powerful statement. Get back with us if you have any questions or if this is not clear to you.
Mark
How to Write An Introduction for an Essay About Myself?
I have to write an essay about an idea I've had that has been harder than I anticipated, and I am having trouble figuring out how to write an introduction to it. Please help!
i suggest you to directly write your points that you want. just start with 'I am going to explain...I am going to describe...'
Your best bet is to post a draft; it really helps ensure constructive feedback.
I have the same question. :[
you can begin with talk about the unique thing that you really love to do.
