Faerie Queene Book I--Help editing/criticizing my 4 page paper

Hey Guys,
I have a Faerie Queene paper that I was wondering if someone could edit. On my last essay, my essay was torn apart from top to bottom and my grade wasn't that great...I'm just not a writer. But nonetheless, I need a good grade because I'm premed so I worked really hard on this paper.

The problem with me is that I have never done a close reading essay before. I base all of my writing skills on my early high school years...and thats not very good. My last paper got torn apart for having logical inconsistencies, deviation from thesis, not analyzing enough, phrasing thing awkwardly, assuming things that I shouldn't be assuming, "summarizing too much, and not analyzing enough",...basically everything I could think of.

I was wondering if someone could try to help me out by editing my paper. I feel safer emailing it (sorry for inconvenience). I just don't want to be torn apart again and receiving another unsatisfying grade. If someone could try to help me on all the things listed above, that would be great.

thanks guys
oh yeah, and did i say I'm bad at writing?=p

Greetings!

Sorry, but we can't provide our free help through email. You will need to post your essay here if you want some editing advice.

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EssayForum.com

Hey Sarah,

I made a spambox email (an email that lasts for a day) that will forward to my current email address. It is: Dy9vvYBjhyWAfw9r@spambox.us

I just read the TOS. Didn't read it before I posted this, so sorry about my first comment. I was wondering if I could pay you for an hour of good critiquing/editing of my essay. I think most of my ideas work, just some may not be worded correctly to fit the thesis. I can pay the suggested $25 through paypal.

Sorry for this whole email spiel, I am very concerned about plagiarism accusations since we have to turn it in to turnitin.com.

Please get back to me soon, this essay is due in 22 hours time.

Greetings!

The way that you are protected against plagiarism on this site is by using your real name when you sign up. That way, there is a record that you are the author of the essay. Many students post here without any problem from plagiarism checkers, because your membership on this site shows that you are the original author.

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com