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Whole-to-whole or Part-to-part structure - "Two people you know"; comparison and contrast Paragraph


I have been a Assignment this week, my topic is "Two people you know". My paragraph must have either a Whole-to-whole or Part-to-part structure, and it must feature at last 3 criteria. Anyone can help me with som ideas. Thank Yoy very much.

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Sometimes a part-to-part structure comparison is easier; it depends on your topic. If you are comparing two people you know really well, this may prove to be true. For instance, if you use your parents, you could compare their attitudes on a certain topic, such as their favorite ice creams, or kinds of movies they like to watch. You could compare and contrast them in their jobs (i.e. they both work in offices, or one works in an office and the other is a lumber foreman, etc.)

I would suggest using people you know really well so that you have many points to compare and contrast.

I hope this helps!

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Gloria
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I have a assignment and due on Tuesday. Topic choice " Two people you know", my assignment requests the paragraph must have either a Whole-to-Whole or Part-to-Part structure, and it must feature at least 3 criteria.And this is my paragraph,I chose Part-to -Part. Plz helps me to edit my writing, and plz give me some ideas for my conclusion because my grammar is dangerous. Thanks for your help.

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Good morning!

You have a good essay here. The following are my suggestions:

My aunt and my uncle are both good people, but I prefer my uncle than my aunt because he is easier, happier, and more generous. My aunt is a mean person[font#FF0000], (Change this comma to a semi colon.)

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I rewrited my paragarp,and do you think the third example was matching with the third criteria ? Plz help me to check it again.thank you very much.

My aunt and my uncle are both good people, but I prefer my uncle than my aunt because he is easier, happier, and more generous. First, my aunt is not easy person; she is always cold with everyone in her family. She is a person who talks while she works, and when she works, she expects everyone around her to work along with her.

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Good afternoon! OK, let's see what we have now:

My aunt and my uncle are both good people, but I prefer my uncle than (Change this to "rather" my aunt because he is easier, happier, and more generous. First, my aunt is not an easy person; she is always cold with everyone in her family. She is a person who talks while she works, and when she works, she expects everyone around her to work along with her. On the other hand, my uncle is easier than my aunt; he would never do that with anyone in his family. He is always quiet when he cleans up or does something, even while he is cleaning house, but other people are watching TV; he also works with a smile on his face. For example, yesterday, my aunt got off from work earlier than she did last time and went home first, and then she cooked dinner. While she was cooking, her husband came home and sat on the sofa. My aunt saw that and got angry. My aunt did not feel happy and asked why my uncle did not help her cook, but instead just sat and watched TV. She complained a lot, but my uncle kept quiet and came to help her. Second, my aunt is not a happy woman. She does not want to go out; she just wants go to work seven days a week. Moreover, she never wants anyone to come to her house, or even to have a party because she is very clean. Thus, if people come over to her house, she is not happy and always worries about cleaning the house all over again. On the contrary, my uncle is a very happy person. He invites his friends to come to his house and to have party on the weekends. For instance, last week, my uncle had a reunion party for students who studied with him during high school, so they wanted to organize it at his house because his house is very big. However, my aunt didn't want it there. She thought if they organized in her house, she has (Change to "would have") had to clean up and it will make her tired when the party is finished. Therefore, she refused and they decided to hold the party at a restaurant. Finally, my aunt is not as generous as my uncle. When she gives something to someone's; (Remove both the apostrophe and semi colon here.) she wants to know about what is going on and more detail before she gives it to them. In contrast, my uncle is different. He wants to give to someone something and just does it without caring about anything. For example, last week, her son sister's wedding was in Vietnam. After the wedding, her sister borrowed money from her friend; my uncle knew that and gave her money to pay back for her friend, but my aunt told him, "Give your money to me let me send it to her." In order for her to send it, she has (Change to "would have") to know how much money she owes her friend; this shows how nosy she (We've got a lot of "she"s in this statement; let's change this one to "my aunt".) is. In conclusion everyone has his or her own characteristics. My both uncle and aunt are good and they treat people according to their ways. However, I prefer my uncle more because it can make other people happy and easy to live with people around me.

Very nice! A big improvement!

Regards,
Gloria
Moderator, EssayForum.com
Good evening !
Thank you for your help.
I gave my friend to read, and she said, "I think third example is not matching with the criteria three" Do you think so? if yes or no, pls let me know. Thank you again!
my criteria three is generous. Finally, my aunt is not as generous as my uncle. When my aunt gives something to someone. she wants to know about what is going on and more detail before she gives it to them. In contrast, my uncle is different. He wants to give to someone something and just does it without caring about anything. For example, last week, her son sister's wedding was in Vietnam. After the wedding, her sister borrowed money from her friend; my uncle knew that and gave her money to pay back for her friend, but my aunt told him, "Give your money to me let me send it to her." In order for her to send it, she would have to know how much money she owes her friend; this shows how nosy she is.
Pls help me to find out it. thank you very much.
Well, the example you give does not show that she is generous; on the contrary, it shows that she is a busybody. If you wanted to use an example showing her being generous, how about the fact that she works seven days a week? Is she generous that she spends so much of her time earning money for her family? Or, you could instead write that the two contrast in the area of generosity and then use this example. Either one of these ideas would work.

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Gloria
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