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I have been a Assignment this week, my topic is "Two people you know". My paragraph must have either a Whole-to-whole or Part-to-part structure, and it must feature at last 3 criteria. Anyone can help me with som ideas. Thank Yoy very much.
Good afternoon!

Sometimes a part-to-part structure comparison is easier; it depends on your topic. If you are comparing two people you know really well, this may prove to be true. For instance, if you use your parents, you could compare their attitudes on a certain topic, such as their favorite ice creams, or kinds of movies they like to watch. You could compare and contrast them in their jobs (i.e. they both work in offices, or one works in an office and the other is a lumber foreman, etc.)

I would suggest using people you know really well so that you have many points to compare and contrast.

I hope this helps!

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Gloria
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I have a assignment and due on Tuesday. Topic choice " Two people you know", my assignment requests the paragraph must have either a Whole-to-Whole or Part-to-Part structure, and it must feature at least 3 criteria.And this is my paragraph,I chose Part-to -Part. Plz helps me to edit my writing, and plz give me some ideas for my conclusion because my grammar is dangerous. Thanks for your help.

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Good morning!

You have a good essay here. The following are my suggestions:

My aunt and my uncle are both good people, but I prefer my uncle than my aunt because he is easier, happier, and more generous. My aunt is a mean person, (Change this comma to a semi colon.) she is always scold (Do you mean "cold"?) with everyone in her family. She is a person who is working and talking when she cleans up her house or does something. When she works, her want s everyone has to work with her. (How about, "She is a person who talks while she works, and when she works she expects everyone around her to work along with her.") while my uncle is never do that with anyone in family (How about, "On the other hand, my uncle would never do that with anyone in his famiy.") . He is always quiet when he cleans up or does something, even while he is cleaning house, and everyone is watching TV; he also works with a smile on his face. For example, today my aunt got out (Change to "off") from work earlier than last time and went home first, then she cooked dinner. while (Change to "While".) she was cooking, her husband came home and sat on the sofa. My aunt saw that and got angry. Then she asked him, "Why are you sitting there? Don't you see me what I'm doing?" my uncle quieted (Change to "got quiet".) and did not say anything and my aunt said," You have to find whatever you can work, but don't go home and sit there." (How about changing to, "You have to find whatever you can for work; don't come home and just sit there.") The other hand, my aunt is not happy ones; she does not want to go out, but she just wants go to work seven a week. (How about, "On the other hand, my aunt is not a happy woman. She does not want to go out, she just wants to work seven days a week.") Moreover, she is never want people come her house to have a party because she is very clean, so if people come to her house, she is not happy, she thinks she has to clean house again. (How about, "Moreover, she never wants anyone to come to her house, not even to have a party, necause she is very clean. If people come over to her house, she isn't happy and thinks she needs to clean the house all over again.") While my uncle is a very happy person, he wants invited (How about either "...he invites his friends to come to his house and have a party on the weekend..." or "...he wants to invite people over to have parties on the weekends...") his friends come his house and has party on weekend. For instance, next month, my uncle has a reunion from high school, so they want to organize it at his house because his house is very big, but my aunt doesn't want it there. She thinks if they organize in her house, she has to clean up and that makes her tired when the party is finished. Therefore, she refused and they decided organization (Change to "to have it".) at a restaurant. Consequently (This statement is not a consequence of an action. Change this transition to a more appropriate one such as "also" or "in addition to this...") , my aunt is not as generous as my uncle. When she gives something to someone, she wants to know about what is going on and more detail before she gives it . While my uncle is different ; he wants to give to someone something and he just gives it . He does not need to know how, why, ete (etc.) ... Only one period here. For example, Last (Don't capitalize.) week, her son's sister's wedding was in Vietnam. After the wedding, her sister borrowed money from her friend; my uncle knew that and gave her money to pay back for her friend, but my aunt told him, "Give your money to me and let I (Change to "me".) send it to her." Before I sent it to her, I have to know how much she has to pay to her fiend. (How about rewriting this to, "In order for her to send it, she has to know how much money she owes her friend; this shows how nosy she is."
Make a new paragraph for your conclusion. In conclusion, both are good and (Change to "but") each person has character different (Change to "has different characteristics." . Each character is good and bad sometimes. So, it depends on each situation and in case how should we treat it. (How about, "So, it depends on the situation, how each one will treat it."

You are very observant, and you have really good descriptions in this essay. Good work!

Regards,
Gloria
Moderator, EssayForum.com
Good morning!
I rewrited my paragarp,and do you think the third example was matching with the third criteria ? Plz help me to check it again.thank you very much.

My aunt and my uncle are both good people, but I prefer my uncle than my aunt because he is easier, happier, and more generous. First, my aunt is not easy person; she is always cold with everyone in her family. She is a person who talks while she works, and when she works, she expects everyone around her to work along with her. On the other hand, my uncle is easier than my aunt; he would never do that with anyone in his family. He is always quiet when he cleans up or does something, even while he is cleaning house, but other people are watching TV; he also works with a smile on his face. For example, yesterday, my aunt got off from work earlier than she did last time and went home first, and then she cooked dinner. While she was cooking, her husband came home and sat on the sofa. My aunt saw that and got angry. My aunt did not feel happy and asked why my uncle did not help her cook, but just sat and watched TV. She complained a lot, but my uncle kept quiet and came to help her. Second, my aunt is not a happy woman. She does not want to go out; she just wants go to work seven days a week. Moreover, she never wants anyone to come to her house, or even to have a party because she is very clean. Thus, if people come over to her house, she is not happy and always worries about cleaning the house all over again. On the contrary, my uncle is a very happy person. He invites his friends to come to his house and to have party on the weekends. For instance, last week, my uncle had a reunion party for students who studied with him during high school, so they want to organize it at his house because his house is very big. However, my aunt didn't want it there. She thought if they organize in her house, she has had to clean up and it will make her tired when the party is finished. Therefore, she refused and they decided to hold the party at a restaurant. Finally, my aunt is not as generous as my uncle. When she gives something to someone's; she wants to know about what is going on and more detail before she gives it to them. In contrast, my uncle is different. He wants to give to someone something and just does it without caring about anything. For example, last week, her son sister's wedding was in Vietnam. After the wedding, her sister borrowed money from her friend; my uncle knew that and gave her money to pay back for her friend, but my aunt told him, "Give your money to me let me send it to her. In order for her to send it, she has to know how much money she owes her friend; this shows how nosy she is. In conclusion everyone has his or her own characteristics. My both uncle and aunt are good and they treat people according to their ways. However, I prefer my uncle more because it can make other people happy and easy to live with people around me.
Good afternoon! OK, let's see what we have now:

My aunt and my uncle are both good people, but I prefer my uncle than (Change this to "rather" my aunt because he is easier, happier, and more generous. First, my aunt is not an easy person; she is always cold with everyone in her family. She is a person who talks while she works, and when she works, she expects everyone around her to work along with her. On the other hand, my uncle is easier than my aunt; he would never do that with anyone in his family. He is always quiet when he cleans up or does something, even while he is cleaning house, but other people are watching TV; he also works with a smile on his face. For example, yesterday, my aunt got off from work earlier than she did last time and went home first, and then she cooked dinner. While she was cooking, her husband came home and sat on the sofa. My aunt saw that and got angry. My aunt did not feel happy and asked why my uncle did not help her cook, but instead just sat and watched TV. She complained a lot, but my uncle kept quiet and came to help her. Second, my aunt is not a happy woman. She does not want to go out; she just wants go to work seven days a week. Moreover, she never wants anyone to come to her house, or even to have a party because she is very clean. Thus, if people come over to her house, she is not happy and always worries about cleaning the house all over again. On the contrary, my uncle is a very happy person. He invites his friends to come to his house and to have party on the weekends. For instance, last week, my uncle had a reunion party for students who studied with him during high school, so they wanted to organize it at his house because his house is very big. However, my aunt didn't want it there. She thought if they organized in her house, she has (Change to "would have") had to clean up and it will make her tired when the party is finished. Therefore, she refused and they decided to hold the party at a restaurant. Finally, my aunt is not as generous as my uncle. When she gives something to someone's; (Remove both the apostrophe and semi colon here.) she wants to know about what is going on and more detail before she gives it to them. In contrast, my uncle is different. He wants to give to someone something and just does it without caring about anything. For example, last week, her son sister's wedding was in Vietnam. After the wedding, her sister borrowed money from her friend; my uncle knew that and gave her money to pay back for her friend, but my aunt told him, "Give your money to me let me send it to her." In order for her to send it, she has (Change to "would have") to know how much money she owes her friend; this shows how nosy she (We've got a lot of "she"s in this statement; let's change this one to "my aunt".) is. In conclusion everyone has his or her own characteristics. My both uncle and aunt are good and they treat people according to their ways. However, I prefer my uncle more because it can make other people happy and easy to live with people around me.

Very nice! A big improvement!

Regards,
Gloria
Moderator, EssayForum.com
Good evening !
Thank you for your help.
I gave my friend to read, and she said, "I think third example is not matching with the criteria three" Do you think so? if yes or no, pls let me know. Thank you again!
my criteria three is generous. Finally, my aunt is not as generous as my uncle. When my aunt gives something to someone. she wants to know about what is going on and more detail before she gives it to them. In contrast, my uncle is different. He wants to give to someone something and just does it without caring about anything. For example, last week, her son sister's wedding was in Vietnam. After the wedding, her sister borrowed money from her friend; my uncle knew that and gave her money to pay back for her friend, but my aunt told him, "Give your money to me let me send it to her." In order for her to send it, she would have to know how much money she owes her friend; this shows how nosy she is.
Pls help me to find out it. thank you very much.
Well, the example you give does not show that she is generous; on the contrary, it shows that she is a busybody. If you wanted to use an example showing her being generous, how about the fact that she works seven days a week? Is she generous that she spends so much of her time earning money for her family? Or, you could instead write that the two contrast in the area of generosity and then use this example. Either one of these ideas would work.

Regards,
Gloria
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