The world we are living there, has witnessed some famous and affected leaders such as Kennedy, Obama. But in my idea one of the effective leader of the all through the world is Nelson Mandella. Because he leads South Africa country to improving and progressing in some area such as: freedom, equal rights, the omission of the slave labor regime and democracy. Here an effort to make some reason to support of my claim in this writing.
The first reason which is worth considering is that Mandela gave freedom to black skin people. Regarding to historical documents, in the southern African country, black people did not have freedom and they should work for white people who emigrated to this country from England and other country. Nelson Mandela during a long fighting and in a precarious condition, could achieve with this goal. Another important contribution who did, is equal rights between people. Black African people before winning in their political struggle, did not have right like white people. The fundamental issue is that after wining their fighting, he forfeited from crime of white people. So they not only did not lose their citizenship, but also remained their rights. The last achievement in the field of rights and freedom, is the omission of the slave labour regime. This goal was one of important and basic target.
The second point is over 90 decades, South Africa country has led to improving in economics. If you look more closely a lot of issues such as increasing trade and worth of money are considering. One concrete example is the FIFA World Cup which held in 2010 in this country. I remember all newspapers and experts believed that South Africa country should thank from Nelson Mandela. Because he gave freedom, democracy and political stability to this country.
In the summery Nelson Mandela is the greatest leader in the world who could lead fundamental change in his country and gain some achievement. Because of his charismatic personality and his wisdom, he could joint contradictory people and received to their target. In addition he based democracy and lasting peace between two enemy people.
- Rephrasing first paragraph;
The world we are living there, has witnessed some famous and affected leaders such as Kennedy, Obama. But in my idea one of the effective leader of the all through the world is Nelson Mandella. Because he leads South Africa country to improving and progressing in some area such as: freedom, equal rights, the omission of the slave labor regime and democracy. Here an effort to make some reason to support of my claim in this writing.
The world we live in has witnessed famous and effective leaders, Kennedy, Obama and Mandela to name a few. Personally, the most effective leader for me is Nelson Mandela. He led South Africa to improve, to progress, to attain freedom, to receive equal rights and be free from slavery.[font#000
- Regarding to historical documents..
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Nelson Mandela during a long fighting and in a precarious condition, could achieve with this goal. Another important contribution who did, is equal rights between people. Black African people before winning in their political struggle, did not have right like white people.
Nelson Mandela can make a difference in this precarious condition,he contributed to promote equal rights between people, Black african and the white people.
- black skin people, I think it's enough to say "black people"
Alid, I must say, your essay still needs to be re-written. Grammar and sentence structure needs to be polished.
I have a few inputs as you see above, re- write your essay and post it back so we can help you further.
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