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What does it mean to be well-educated? Book smart vs. Street smart


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Jan 5, 2013, 12:56am   #1
Prompt: what does it mean to be well-educated?

I feel like this response is kind of going in loops. I guess it does answer the question, but I'm wondering if it answers it thoroughly enough?
Thank y'all in advance! :D

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She spent all her days in the library, and now sheís completed her Masterís degree with top notch marks! Is she well-educated? Maybe, but not quite. He dropped out of college halfway through but with that cunning mouth of his, he can get himself into anywhere! Is he well-educated? Perhaps, but not really. The term Ďwell-educatedí is really quite amorphous, and the meaning tends to shift quite a bit from decade to decade. Back in the 19th century, well-educated meant having the right etiquette to behave correctly in all situations, including speaking multiple languages to greet foreign guests. In modern day 21st century, being well-educated is certainly affiliated with the achievement of numerous degrees and certificates. Itís as if the word well-educated is having an identity crisis! What does it mean, really? Itís a matter of street-smart vs. book smart. The typical Victorian lady may be well-mannered and all, but she really doesnít have the necessary knowledge to survive a real crisis. As for the book smart guy, when it comes to asking a girl out on a date, heís clueless! Now I may be exaggerating a bit but what Iím trying to say is that well-educated person needs to be well-rounded, a mixture of both street smart AND book smart. This person is sociable, can think outside of a textbook yet can also benefit from textbook knowledge. Eureka! That there, madames and monssieurs, is what I call a well-educated individual.

I like your essay a lot!! and completely agree with your idea:) But one thing I should say is that it is hard to say asking a girl out is educated.. you should use another example I guess!! But again, your essay is great!!

Can you read mine and give me any feedback please?? I want to improve my essay!! you don't need to correct my grammatical mistakes!
Jan 5, 2013, 09:34pm   #4
I love this essay. The angle you used tells me a lot about you and shows how rounded you are.

In modern day 21st century you can just say today. Also in this same sentence, you talked about the meaning of well educated in today's world but you failed to say how important it is. Also, being well educated is important , but not necessary.Facebook guy didn't finish school. This would be a good example to show the meaning and importance of getting an education but street education is always important .

Very nice essay. and unique.
Jan 6, 2013, 01:42am   #5
chocolateshoppe:
In modern day 21st century, being well-educated is certainly affiliated with the achievement of numerous degrees and certificates.

"certainly" kind of comes out of nowhere - it seems as though it should allude to something said earlier, but I feel that it's too far from the intro to allude to the information presented there without seeming awkward. Does that make sense? And this may or may not be significant, so feel free to ignore this if you disagree.

But otherwise, I really like it. It's a lot more colloquial than all the other essays I've read - not sure if that's a good thing or a bad thing, but it definitely stands out.
Great essay.
chocolateshoppe:

She spent all her days in the library, and now sheís completed her Masterís degree with top notch marks! Is she well-educated? Maybe, but not quite. He dropped out of college halfway through but with that cunning mouth of his, he can get himself into anywhere! Is he well-educated? Perhaps, but not really.
.......:D AMAZING START.
No words of mine can do justice to yours!;-)

Thanks for reading my essay:-))
Jan 6, 2013, 11:10am   #7
I think your tone may be a little to informal for an undergraduate essay.

chocolateshoppe:
Itís as if the word well-educated is having an identity crisis! What does it mean, really? Itís a matter of street-smart vs. book smart. The typical Victorian lady may be well-mannered and all, but she really doesnít have the necessary knowledge to survive a real crisis. As for the book smart guy, when it comes to asking a girl out on a date, heís clueless! Now I may be exaggerating a bit but what Iím trying to say is that well-educated person needs to be well-rounded, a mixture of both street smart AND book smart. This person is sociable, can think outside of a textbook yet can also benefit from textbook knowledge. Eureka! That there, madames and monssieurs, is what I call a well-educated individual.


I don't think the terms "street smart" or "book smart" fit within a formal application essay. Using the term "street smart" makes it seem like you feel that social traits are attributed to smartness or intelligence. I don't think that is the case. I personally wouldn't use the phrases "Eureka" and "that there, madames and monssieurs" because of there informality.

The tone that you have established in the essay makes it feel like you are giving some sort of boisterous presentation to a group of friends. Is that what you want the admissions officer to be feeling?

I like the ideas of the essay - just make sure you analyze how you sound to the reader.

Good luck with your essay and admissions process!
Jan 6, 2013, 12:13pm   #8
Thanks for your suggestions, I'll make sure to incorporate them into my answer! :)

Th25cc: this essay question does no necessarily have to be formal as the website they said to use a style that represents you. So since I feel like informal is much better suited for me than formal, that's what I went with. And yeah I did use the word street smart because it is true in a sense that social traits contribute to a person's overall education. It is a latent function of schooling. Thanks though :)

And sushipanda: thanks a lot! Yours was quite good too :)

Taishi: Haha the reason I said asking a girl out on date, I guess I was trying to go for a comical approach, and also it sort of represents an aspect of being street smart.



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