"What makes the economy tick ? What
is the life blood of the economy ?
These are questions one might ask.
Well I am here to tell you what makes
them tick and ultimately survive. The
answer is probably what you are
already thinking: businesses .
Business"n"es,[remove n] more particulary small
business is the driving force behind
the economy . What would happen if
the economy "nowadays"[remove] starts going
down-hill like it has in the past? That
is where "what is called"[remove] the Great
Recession of the past few years takes
place . The Great Recession has
evidently [a]effected small businesses of
all types . ==>As a result of this , during the
time of the Great Recession, if an
employee has more seniority in the
business, then they will not be laid off
as will an employee that is new to the
business. "<== [ I don't understand how this part is relevant to the introduction.]
if you are trying to write about the effect of the recession on small businesses, you may consider this.
Ultimately, small scale enterprises are most affected[by the great recession]. while large cooperations may be bailed out by the government or survive due to large reserves of funds small businesses are not so lucky. Due to their limited funds, they are forced to lay off workers and to eventually fold up.
what do you think?