Nowadays, a large number of students rely
inon computers to
research foraccess information
and to produce a perfect paper work for their homework.for their school assignments and projects.Regarding the use of computer in education, there are two schools of thought.
.... well this is a simple argument and the usage of "two schools of thought" sounds a bit too serious and inappropriate for this situation.
In the last decades there have been immense advances in technology in most aspect especially in the field of education. Nowadays, a large number of students rely in computers to research for information and to produce a perfect paper work for their homework. Regarding the use of computer in education, there are two schools of thought. Some people argue that this computer will die out teachers' role in classroom while this is refuted by others.
There are few things I find missing in this introduction although you have made attempts to follow the appropriate structure. First, its contents lack relevance to the prompt. Your prompt talks about the role played by teachers would be replaced by computers. So what you need to talk about here is that issue. Nothing much is said in that regard. Second, you have not included your own opinion about the issue.