http://www.essayforum.com/ EssayForum News and Discussions Thu, 17 May 2012 11:26:44 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-reasons-people-attend-university-39526/ Hi, I wrote a TOEFL essay, and I have questions about my essay. 1. How well developed are my body paragraphs? 2. Did I include all the details or examples I need? 3. What parts of my essay do I need to improve? Btw, can anyone rate this essay as per TOEFL scoring guideline? I am curious to find out if anyone finds my essay compelling. Thanks in advance! :) Prompt: People attend college or university for many different reasons (for examaple, new experiences, career preparation, ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-reasons-people-attend-university-39526/ Thu, 17 May 2012 11:26:44 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/sat-essay-best-not-change-ideas-opinions-behaviours-39525/ We all find difficuly making choices, especially when our ideas conflict with those of others. When shopping online, I often hestitate for a long time if what I would like to buy receives negative remark from other customers. However, sometimes we are more likely to make right decisions if we stick to our own ideas. From US history, one can see how this statement proves to be true. Willia Loyld Garrison, the editor of 'the liberator' , never abandoned his determination as an ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/sat-essay-best-not-change-ideas-opinions-behaviours-39525/ Thu, 17 May 2012 10:43:45 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/statement-purpose-masters-drug-regulatory-affairs-drugs-39524/ Hello friends. I am in an urgent need for statement of purpose for Masters in Drug regulatory affairs in biologics , drugs and devices.. I request you to help me out as soon as possible. http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/statement-purpose-masters-drug-regulatory-affairs-drugs-39524/ Thu, 17 May 2012 10:21:11 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/grammar-usage-13/first-motorcycle-ride-39523/ "how am i supposed to stay on?" was my first question when i couldn't reach my legs to balance the bike."all you have to do is initially try to balance and start and then you can fly like a bird" said dad and uncle putting their encouraging words.mom was perplexed worrying that the bike might fall and i might hurt my leg,i gave her the confidence that i wont fall but i could see cars and other vehicles in my road.me,dad and uncle headed to a nearby ground but it was ... http://www.essayforum.com/grammar-usage-13/first-motorcycle-ride-39523/ Thu, 17 May 2012 10:20:21 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/word-analysis-robert-frosts-road-not-taken-39522/ Approximately 300 word analysis of Robert Frost's poem, "The Road Not Taken". The analysis is purely to focus more on themes, but also how each theme is conveyed using techniques. Could you take the time to check/review my analysis and give any advice if possible. Thanks in advance. The major theme in Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken" is based on choices and life decisions that may or may not contain risks involved. The speaker in the poem is travelling and ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/word-analysis-robert-frosts-road-not-taken-39522/ Thu, 17 May 2012 06:15:35 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/contribute-skills-other-students-mba-program-39521/ In the IT Enabled Services Industry, I have been working in international and multi-cultural teams. Although my work is technical in nature, it revolves around Service Level Agreements, Customer Satisfaction and Scorecards. The services we provide to our clients are based on ITIL (Information Technology Infrastructure Library) V3 foundation. As a person, who has worked for financial institutions (the clients) and understands the role of IT in their business, I can give my fellow students an ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/contribute-skills-other-students-mba-program-39521/ Thu, 17 May 2012 04:49:21 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/task-married-women-nowadays-not-home-take-care-children-39520/ Question: The position of women in society has changed markedly in the last 20 years. many of the problems young people now experience, such as juvenile deliquency, arise from the fact that many married women now work and are not at home to care for their children. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? In the last two decades, women's status in society has come to a new level, where they and men are all equal. As a result, many mothers nowadays have to care more ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/task-married-women-nowadays-not-home-take-care-children-39520/ Thu, 17 May 2012 02:21:01 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/sat-essay-worrying-too-much-other-peoples-opinions-39519/ assignment:Does worrying too much about other people's opinions prevents us from seeing things clearly? Before making choices, we often seek for other people's opinions. For example, when I decide to purchase online, I often refer to former customers' assessments first. However, because individuals often express their points to achieve certain goals, such ideas may fail to report the truth. Thus, it can be readily stated that peole may find it difficult to discover the truth if ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/sat-essay-worrying-too-much-other-peoples-opinions-39519/ Thu, 17 May 2012 01:49:31 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/appeal-letter-admission-grammar-need-help-39518/ Dear Admissions Committee: My name is __, an accepted transfer student for spring'13. I am writing a letter of appeal to reconsider my entering term of admission. As I understand many spring admitted student appealed for fall admission, I am a bit afraid that I bother admissions committee. Even though I was thinking to just enter College Name in spring'13, my desire to attend ___ led me to write this letter. As I am already 21, I don't want to graduate too late. I considered ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/appeal-letter-admission-grammar-need-help-39518/ Thu, 17 May 2012 01:37:31 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/forms-entertainment-court-maintain-society-balance-topics-of-39517/ Hi all, I am taking IElts test next month, trying to practise writing as much as possible. but the problem is hard for me to find out someone could help me with my writing. today, i send to you my writing, hoping someone can help me a little. tks 1. The graph below shows how money was spent on different forms of entertainment over a five- year period. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information show below. The graph describes a considerable proportion of the United ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/forms-entertainment-court-maintain-society-balance-topics-of-39517/ Wed, 16 May 2012 23:36:13 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/transfer-essay-bad-history-39516/ First off, my college career hasn't been the greatest. I was attending a well known school, got bad grades, and now I'm transferring to another local university. I know I shouldn't write about a bad history in a transfer essay, but with my transcript I feel like I should at least mention it. I attended community college for a year, got 3.8. Any criticism/advice appreciated. Thanks! I checked my grades at the end of my 3rd year at the (1st university). I knew it, another ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/transfer-essay-bad-history-39516/ Wed, 16 May 2012 22:15:20 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-immigration-adapting-local-laws-39514/ Topic : Some people argue that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. An alternative view is that they can adapt to a new environment by establishing a minority community. Discuss these two views and give your opinion. Currently, the growing economic and political instability has led to the indispensability of migration, as people look for greener pastures in other lands as they hope for attaining success in their lives. Needless to say, some find this ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-immigration-adapting-local-laws-39514/ Wed, 16 May 2012 20:58:02 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/need-help-critical-thinking-essay-39513/ I have an exam essay this evening about the essay I have listed below. Need to have critical thinking ideas. Please help. See essay below. Thanks Editorial Santa Monica College's two-tier trap A proposal to increase fees for certain in-demand classes is understandable but carries too many risks. March 16, 2012 At Santa Monica College, the community college known as a feeder school for UCLA, students are regularly turned away from core academic courses that are oversubscribed-but that ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/need-help-critical-thinking-essay-39513/ Wed, 16 May 2012 14:05:30 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/fatherhood-ought-emphasised-as-much-as-motherhood-39512/ Fatherhood ought to be emphasised as much as motherhood... Please help me on this. I want to know where I stand. Kindly review. Any help in this regard will be great. Thanks. Father has been idealized as the bread earner of the family and mothers role is restricted to taking care of children and home. The decision of having baby is the mutual responsibility of husband and wife. It will be unfair to put the burden of shared responsibility just on the mother. Father is equally responsible ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/fatherhood-ought-emphasised-as-much-as-motherhood-39512/ Wed, 16 May 2012 11:07:25 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/graduate-admission-4/pa-school-narrative-caspa-39510/ I am trying to write a person narrative for Physician Assistant School. The prompt is to describe your motivation towards becoming a PA. The narrative can only be 5,000 characters long, and I was wanting to try and make a memorable impression with my narrative, not just a list of why I want to be a PA. I am terrible with grammar, especially the use of commas. Please comment and do not worry about being harsh, I want this to be the best it can be. Thank you! It was New Years day I was ... http://www.essayforum.com/graduate-admission-4/pa-school-narrative-caspa-39510/ Wed, 16 May 2012 08:15:24 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/lia-hi-essay-spongebob-effects-children-39509/ Children use most of their time to watch TV than playing around. And cartoon is the best channel for them. One of cartoon animation that children loved to see is SpongeBob SquarePants. SpongeBob SquarePants is cartoon that produced by Nickelodeon in 1990's which designed to children. Nowadays, in 2012, SpongeBob become more popular than before and for satisfied the viewers SpongeBob is aired two times per day, in the morning and afternoon, with duration 1 hour for each show. It caused ... http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/lia-hi-essay-spongebob-effects-children-39509/ Wed, 16 May 2012 07:33:59 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/spelman-admission-essay-am-going-towards-right-direction-39508/ Seeking knowledge and a commitment to service are integral parts of the Spelman experience. Discuss and illustrate the ways in which you have shown your commitment to these areas. (500-1000 Words) *note this is just the beginning of the essay I've always had a longing to seek knowledge but, it has been a battle to get to where I am today. At a young age I was a spunky little girl ready for anything that was thrown at me. I was placed in search classes after kindergarten and it seemed ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/spelman-admission-essay-am-going-towards-right-direction-39508/ Wed, 16 May 2012 06:32:56 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/pp-students-study-same-national-curriculum-until-college-39507/ This is my fist try...need some help and advice. 5/27 is the date to fight with GRE QQ Thanks! topic:A nation should require all of its students to study the same national curriculum until they enter college. Write a response in which you discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree with the recommendation and explain your reasoning for the position you take. In developing and supporting your position, describe specific circumstances in which adopting the recommendation would or would ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/pp-students-study-same-national-curriculum-until-college-39507/ Wed, 16 May 2012 06:00:44 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/need-essay-reviewed-top-areas-improvement-thanks-39506/ Please review this draft essay and let me know the top 3 areas of improvement. Thank you all very much! Kyle J English 102 Professor Gryder 16 May 2012 War in Afghanistan and Iraq The United States of American is the greatest country in the world and because of that, the attraction for terrorism is always a ... http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/need-essay-reviewed-top-areas-improvement-thanks-39506/ Wed, 16 May 2012 03:43:06 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/introduce-myself-39505/ Welcome to my sites. My name is Chokkhana Trisuwan but most people call me Tonkla. I am a PC2 student at Mahidol University International College. My major is finance. I would like to tell you a little bit about my background, interests, achievements, and my goals. I was born on July 5th, 1994 in Chonburi, Thailand. I started going to school at St.Joseph Rayong School since a kindergarten level until I graduated junior high school level. Then I continued study a senior high school level at ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/introduce-myself-39505/ Wed, 16 May 2012 03:24:47 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/can-technology-alone-solve-worlds-environmental-problems-39504/ Development in technology causes environmental problems. Some people believe the solution in these problems is everyone accepts a simpler way of life, while others say that technology can solve these problems. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. It is irrefutable that progress in technology leads to environmental problems. Some individuals are of the opinion that if people live a simple life and do not use the things that technology has brought us then these problems can be solved ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/can-technology-alone-solve-worlds-environmental-problems-39504/ Wed, 16 May 2012 02:59:15 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-wealthy-nations-vs-poorer-nations-39502/ Hello Everybody, Please check my essay and give your comments, Thank you very much in advance, Kh. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such thing as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Some people believe that the wealthy nations have to provide the help to the poorer ones. Others think that the government of poorer nations should take care of ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-wealthy-nations-vs-poorer-nations-39502/ Tue, 15 May 2012 23:22:46 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/have-give-speach-plz-give-good-feedback-on-39500/ The outcome of tom Robinsons trail was obviously wrong. Tom was found guilty by an all white jury of beating and raping Mayella Ewell. The evidence against him was Mayella Ewell and her fathers word against his. Mayella said that she asked him to help chop up a chiffarobe and when her back was turned he jumped her beat her and raped her. Her father's story also concurred with hers. She was obviously beat said the sheriff and that her right eye was beat up more than her left. Although ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/have-give-speach-plz-give-good-feedback-on-39500/ Tue, 15 May 2012 20:58:00 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/engineering-personal-statement-uni-plz-plz-help-39499/ i have written my personal statement and would like you to kindly proof read it and help with the structure of the words in bold. and any other adjustment you think is need make thank you One of my favourite insects is the butterfly. I am especially drawn to its ability to transform from an unattractive and unassuming caterpillar trapped in a cocoon into a free and beautiful butterfly. In many ways, I am like the caterpillar in its final stage of development: newly formed butterfly wings ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/engineering-personal-statement-uni-plz-plz-help-39499/ Tue, 15 May 2012 20:13:01 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/advantages-early-creating-family-39498/ This is my first IELTS essay too. Could you please correct it? In recent times it is common for the people to get married after finishing their studies and after finding a good job. Nevertheless there are some people who decide to make a family in the beginning of the third decade of their life or even during the second one, especially for women. In this essay I will present some pros and some cons of this decision in the frame of the current culture of western society. One major advantage ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/advantages-early-creating-family-39498/ Tue, 15 May 2012 16:17:24 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/research-papers-11/effect-bullying-psych-research-paper-need-help-outline-intro-39497/ Intro define bullying briefly discuss different type of bullying? physical, verbal, cyber? lead to thesis- who bullies target, health concerns of being bullied, routes to take for change. Any suggestions on how I can start, and helping me break down on what I should write would be greatly appreciated. Thanks! http://www.essayforum.com/research-papers-11/effect-bullying-psych-research-paper-need-help-outline-intro-39497/ Tue, 15 May 2012 18:39:49 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/graduate-admission-4/computing-science-research-knowledge-review-sop-39495/ i dont want a research based masters. I am looking for a course based masters. Here is my SOP. My expedition for gaining knowledge about computers got a kick start from my interest and curiosity in computer games back in my school. I did not just enjoy playing computer games but also was keen in knowing how things actually worked so as to amaze me with a few pushes of keyboard buttons and mouse clicks. I wondered how my character would jump when I hit space bar. That was the time when I ... http://www.essayforum.com/graduate-admission-4/computing-science-research-knowledge-review-sop-39495/ Tue, 15 May 2012 15:49:50 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-business-research-center-agriculture-center-39494/ Hi all, Please check my short essay on agriculture and help me with some more ideas. A university plans to develop a new research center in your country. Some people want a center for business research. Other people want a center for research in agriculture (farming). Which of these two kinds of research centers do you recommend for your country? Use specific reasons in your recommendation. I would recommend a research center for agriculture (farming) in my ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-business-research-center-agriculture-center-39494/ Tue, 15 May 2012 14:08:04 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/graduate-admission-4/personal-statement-mph-program-concentration-community-39493/ Hello everyone, Below please find my personal statement for MPH programs. I am interested in applying to only the Global/Community Health programs and therefore have centered my statement around that. I have re-read it and changed it a few times but I think its ready for peer reviews now. Constructive criticism will be really appreciated. Thank you all for your help. ====================================================================== ... http://www.essayforum.com/graduate-admission-4/personal-statement-mph-program-concentration-community-39493/ Tue, 15 May 2012 14:07:50 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/essay-needs-review-please-comment-39492/ Immigration Reform By Matthew Harris Professor McBride First Year Compostion 15 May 2012 Harris 1 Matthew Harris Professor McBride First Year Composition 15 May 2012 Immigration Reform-Is It Necessary? The United States has a long and rich history of immigration seeping in its veins. Our country was founded by immigrants. Our great nation is considered "The Melting Pot" blend of all other countries and their heritages and traditions. So why have we closed our doors and chosen to ... http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/essay-needs-review-please-comment-39492/ Tue, 15 May 2012 13:17:43 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/review-readmission-suspension-essay-uofh-39491/ I am reapplying to my school from academic suspension, I would love some feedback about my essay, please help me make it as clear and articulate as possible. thanks everyone. PROMPT: The statement of readiness must have the following information: What major you want to pursue and why. Explain causes for academic suspension and how you plan to remedy the situation. Explain what you did during your time away from UH. Explain what will be changed to make sure that academic success will occur ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/review-readmission-suspension-essay-uofh-39491/ Tue, 15 May 2012 12:41:01 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-letter-family-living-rented-accommodation-39490/ You and your family are living in rented accommodation in an English speaking city, and you are not satisfied with the condition of some of furniture. Write a letter to the landlord. In your letter · Introduce yourself. · Explain what is wrong with the furniture. · Say what action you would like the landlord to take. Dear Sir, I am Dr. Hadi Ibrahim, the tenant of flat 26th in the 8th floor of Olaya building since first of this month. My first impression about the ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/essay-letter-family-living-rented-accommodation-39490/ Tue, 15 May 2012 12:25:01 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/influence-homework-students-learning-39489/ My lecture asked me to make an argumentative writing which have to show two sides of perspectives. I've already done many times revision. what about this? please give the correction from every aspects of my writing. thanks in advance :) There is no doubt that many teachers assign homework to students almost everyday. For some of the students, homework can be a tool to deepen their understanding towards the material, yet for others, homework can be something which can burden them. They ... http://www.essayforum.com/essays-term-papers-1/influence-homework-students-learning-39489/ Tue, 15 May 2012 11:07:47 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/need-help-topics-phd-39488/ hi I have done mba in hr and finance and also cleared UGC NET in HRM.I want some suggestion for Phd topics in such a way so dat i can inculcate both HR and Finance topics in my Phd topic. Is it possible to do that. I want my topic in such a way so dat it is majorly related to HR and mildly related to finance. can anyone help me in this regard. http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/need-help-topics-phd-39488/ Tue, 15 May 2012 10:54:52 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/one-should-never-judge-person-external-appearance-39487/ Do you agree or disagree with the following statement. " Don't judge a book by its cover ". From the adage, it is clearly shown that we should not judge a person by it's external appearance. Although some may oppose this thinking, however, I strongly agree that this dictum has its own point. External appearance is not consistent. By this I mean, through cosmetics these days, a person can change his or her appearance easily. To be more precise, a person can change his or ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/one-should-never-judge-person-external-appearance-39487/ Tue, 15 May 2012 08:11:02 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/writing-task-should-wealthy-nations-help-poorer-ones-39486/ i have only been learning english for 5 months and my writing skills is very bad so you might find some silly errors in my essay, sorry about that :) and if it's possible, please give me a brand score, i just want to know where i'm at right now, thanks again! Question: should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as foods and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to loof after their own ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/writing-task-should-wealthy-nations-help-poorer-ones-39486/ Tue, 15 May 2012 07:19:37 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/job-satisfaction-meeting-employees-needs-essay-39483/ IELTS 7 Test 3 Writing Task 2 As most people spend a major part of their adult life at work, job satisfaction is an important element if indiviadual wellbeing. What factors contribute to job satisfaction ? How realistic is the expection of job satifaction for all workers? The job satisfaction issue has been an increasingly hot topic of discussion, because people spend most their life at work. In this essay I will analyze some possible factors of this phenomenon and then propose some ... http://www.essayforum.com/writing-feedback-3/job-satisfaction-meeting-employees-needs-essay-39483/ Tue, 15 May 2012 01:55:50 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/essay-life-goals-expectations-program-am-applying-39482/ Hello, I have to write an essay on my life goals. I'm having trouble with writing a thesis and basically the entire essay. and i still need to add more to my goals paragraph. Please help!!! My name is Aisha Torres. I am a 22 year old mother to a beautiful 2 year old girl named Ameeyah Denise. She's super adorable and extremely smart. I was employed for 3 years straight until I finally decided to quit my job to become a fulltime student. Going to college is something i've ... http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/essay-life-goals-expectations-program-am-applying-39482/ Tue, 15 May 2012 01:27:27 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/to-compare-contrast-39481/ How to write comparison essay on two stories "A GOOD MAN IS HARD TO FIND" and "Heels Like White Elephants" What are the similarities and differences? http://www.essayforum.com/undergraduate-admission-2/to-compare-contrast-39481/ Mon, 14 May 2012 23:58:45 -0500 http://www.essayforum.com/literature-review-5/minute-essay-question-lord-flies-re-civilisation-39477/ I would like to know if my writing is a good enough to get me the top grades. My teacher said i might need to analyse the use of language more however she also said she didn't know as it's a new exam bored. How does Golding present civilization in the novel `Lord of the Flies`? Golding suggests, through the characters and events of this novel that acting civilised is a custom that is adopted by society, however he also suggests that civilisation itself may not be as strong as some ... http://www.essayforum.com/literature-review-5/minute-essay-question-lord-flies-re-civilisation-39477/ Mon, 14 May 2012 09:02:09 -0500