[TOEFL]Renewable resources of energy or traditional resources of energy

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Renewable resources of energy (sun ,wind, water) will soon replace the old resources of fossil fuels(gas ,oil and coal ) ,agree or disagree?


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"When people ask whether renewable resources of energy will soon replace the traditional resources of fossil fuels or not. standpoint ,vary from individual to individual"

People's standpoints vary when asked whether or not renewable resouces of energy will soon replace the traditional resources of fossil fuels.

"Renewable resources is hot topic in recently world , most of people agree renewable resources of energy will replace the traditional resources which is also my opinion."

Renewable resources are a hot topic in today's world, and most people agree that renewable resources of energy will replace the traditional resources. I agree with this view.

"In first place ,the significant reason that can present to developed my position is that renewable resources more efficient than traditional resources."

In the first place, the most significant reason to support my position is that renewable resources are more efficient than traditional resources.

"From the recently research ,one gallon biology fuel can drive one car one hundred kilometers ,but in other side ,one gallon oil only can drive the same car thirty five kilometers. From this survey ,we can learn how renewable can more efficient than traditional resources."

From recent research, one gallon of biological fuel can drive one car one hundred kilometers. However, one gallon of oil can only drive the same car thirty-five kilometers. From this survey, we see how renewable resources can be more effecient than traditional resources.

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Renewable resources of energy (sun ,wind, water) will soon replace the old resources of fossil fuels(gas ,oil and coal ) ,agree or disagree?


hi Aaron,

I think you should start your first paragraph like this------->

This is true that we have been using non-renewable resources of energy for long time, and there must be a time in future when all these resources would finish because ther are limited. And, this is also true that we are facing problem of pollution and greenhouse due to rapid use of non-renewable resource of energy........... EXPLAIN PROBLEMS FURTHER.
.............................YOU HAVE TO TELL WHY WE WILL REPLACE............................................

Para 2 and 3

GIVE REASON what would happen if don't replace?



Last para 4

tell that

you believe that if we keep using these non-renewable resources they would finish and we would not be able to derive them. It is also necessay for us to keep our environment clean and green because trees absorb cabon-dioxide and release oxygen, which necessary for healthy life. Goverments of all countries should take initiative to replace renewable resources of energy (sun ,wind, water) with non-renewable resurces of enrgy.

Great job here.

It will be interesting if you read some articles by experts and then cite them like this.

Another important consideration is biomass energy (Kaygusuz and Türker, 2002).

You can see the article here:

sciencedirect.com/science?_ob=ArticleURL&_udi=B6V4S-459J60P- D&_user=10&_rdoc=1&_fmt=&_orig=search&_sort=d&_docanchor=&vi ew=c&_searchStrId=1074579755&_rerunOrigin=scholar .google&_acct=C000050221&_version=1&_urlVersion=0&_userid=10 &md5=fb0d0ab6236525432e1ace81aad160f5

When people ask whether renewable resources of energy will soon replace the traditional resources of fossil fuels or not a fragment
Renewable resources is hot topic in recently world , most of people agree that renewable resources of energy will replace the traditional resources, which is also my opinion.

In first place ,the a significant reason that can present to developed my position is that renewable resources are more efficient than traditional resources. From the recently research ,one gallon biology fuel can supply enough energy for driving a can drive one car one hundred kilometers ,but in other side ,one gallon oil only can drive the same car thirty five kilometers. From this survey ,we can learn compare how renewable can more efficient than traditional resources.

To further clarify my point ,I would take advantage of statistics tool to analyze this issue. probing what we can learn from number. An recently survey made by statistics company-STA which is biggest statistics company in UK, indicates that in one million respondents , eighty percent respondents agree that renewable resources of energy will soon replace the traditional resources of energy and also in two thousands respondents by scientists ,seventy three percent scientist agree that . no one can doubt the truth behind the number.


Last but absolutely not the least, the argument I support in the first paragraph is also in the position of advantage (because renewable resources of energy without the pollution issue) is a fragement.The traditional resources of energy will release tremendous of air pollution for example like carbon dioxide which is the key factor leading to global warming .

In conclusion, based on all the aspects above, it is undeniable that fossil fuels are still important to our lives, but we can easily reach the conclusion: renewable resources of energy will soon replace the fossil fuels.

hi,idvision
in my opinion, the paragraph 4 should be put to the front of the paragraph 3.

the other reason is that traditional resources has harmful effects to the envirunment.The traditional resources of energy will release tremendous of air pollution for example carbon dioxide is the key factor lead global warming,and the sulfur dioxide is the main reason for the acid rain.
forthermore, the tapical traditional resources is not infinite, human need to find new energy to instead.
at last,I would take advantage of statistics tool to analyze this issue. probing what we can learn from number. An recently survey made by statistics company-STA which is biggest statistics company in UK, indicate that in one million respondents , eighty percent respondents agree that renewable resources of energy will soon replace the traditional resources of energy and also in two thousands respondents by scientists ,seventy three percent scientist agree that . no one can doubt the truth behind the number.

The URL is not incorrect. You just need to omit few spaces

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