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spend more time working hard on jobs or staywith families?

florazhouThreads: 5
Posts: 29 		 Apr 25, 09, 12:04am   #1
Do you agree or disagree the following statement: it is more important to spend time working hard on jobs than being with families?


In daily life...

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zhou ruitong
 
Stefanie ChanThreads: 2
Posts: 14 		 Apr 25, 09, 11:51am   #2
What about financial reasons for people working hard?
I think many people hold a belief that if they work hard they can give their families a better material life, but they have ignored the fact that sometimes family problems such as spouse or child abuses, divorce, child neglect, or just conflicts and arguments are caused by overworking, time stress, lack of communications, and ones' own mental wellbeing. I think you have kind of touched on this ideas, but you may want to add more details to strengthen your point if you are allowed to write more.
If you want to put counterarguments you can discuss about the advantages of working hard, as other than the pursuit of social status there are something else, like money..

Yin Fan Chan
 
macawtopiaThreads: 2
Posts: 7 		 Apr 25, 09, 11:53am   #3
I agree with you, as rewarding as working hard can be, it can't compare to the joys of having a comfortable and happy family environment.
 
RosamondThreads: 3
Posts: 29 		 Apr 25, 09, 03:30pm   #4
macawtopia:
I agree with you, as rewarding as working hard can be, it can't compare to the joys of having a comfortable and happy family environment.


I, too, agree with you. But the world of today enforces the persuit of financial welfare stages before family joy. Cleary, it is no joy at all to see your children starving in worst cases, or looking with the eye of deprivation at other kids having better lives, in less worse cases. The world of today makes a happy family environment very dear! It is sad, and it is wrong, I agree. Yet, it is true. That's on the one hand.

On the other hand, wasn't it you -in the west- who called for women going out to work?! It is the normal that the husband goes out for work, and it is bearable (though unacceptable) that he be away for long time. But for the mother, the queen of that little kingdom, to leave off as well! Though this is odd - at least for us- still it may be justified for those in need, in extreme need (in developing poor countries). But you in the West made collecting money and going after more profits a kind of "luxury" and proof of liberty. Now you have awakened to the disatrous impacts of running that much after material gains and luxuries.

All the same, "the poor are getting poorer, and the rich are getting richer," from Shakespear's days until today, whether in developed or developing countries. I remember reading some beautiful quotes about money that I would like to share with you,

The real measure of your wealth is how much you'd be worth if you lost all your money. ~Author Unknown


Only when the last tree has died and the last river been poisoned and the last fish been caught will we realise we cannot eat money. ~Cree Indian Proverb


If you lend someone $20, and never see that person again, it was probably worth it. ~Author Unknown


"Your money, or your life." We know what to do when a burglar makes this demand of us, but not when God does. ~Mignon McLaughlin, The Second Neurotic's Notebook, 1966

HD
 
florazhouThreads: 5
Posts: 29 		 Apr 25, 09, 04:36pm   #5
Stefanie Chan:
What about financial reasons for people working hard?
I think many people hold a belief that if they work hard they can give their families a better material life, but they have ignored the fact that sometimes family problems such as spouse or child abuses, divorce, child neglect, or just conflicts and arguments are caused by overworking, time stress, lack of communications, and ones' own mental wellbeing. I think you have kind of touched on this ideas, but you may want to add more details to strengthen your point if you are allowed to write more.
If you want to put counterarguments you can discuss about the advantages of working hard, as other than the pursuit of social status there are something else, like money..


Dear Stefanie

Thank you for your advice,they are really helpful!

Thank you!

zhou ruitong
 
EF_KevinThreads: 12
Posts: 6519 [Moderator] 		Edited by: EF_Kevin  Apr 25, 09, 08:50pm   #6

As what has been come up with，when family is in conflict with working.
This sentenced needs to be revised for clarity. (above)

Which one you will pay more attention to and spend more time on?

Contrary to the opinion of many people who believe that people should spend more time working hard, it is my heartfelt belief that nothing compares to taking time with families enjoying a cozy afternoon.

It would be possible at first to take the view that the young people should pay more attention to their jobs.

The main argument is that the young people are longing for the lead position in their company, such as project manager or satrap.
They are eager to obtaining the insurmountable achievement in their vocation, because they are young and have promising futures. are enough space to ego integrity.

For example discovered new comet ... nothing but their career. This also needs to be reworked for clarity, as it is a bit jumbled.

Wonderful though the advantages of spending more time in work may be, they cannot compete with the benefits that enjoying time with families brings about when the importance of communication with families are taken into consideration.

The more frequently people communicate with families, the more harmonious the relationship among family members is.

Hope this helps!

Kevin, EssayForum.com
 
florazhouThreads: 5
Posts: 29 		Edited by: Moderator  Apr 25, 09, 10:27pm   #7
EF_Kevin:
For example discovered new comet or exploit the new medicine to save people's lives from terminal diseases like cancer, AIDS or Parkinson disease. So they worked through the night and morning, neglects his meals and sleep, and even forgets their parents birthday, they focus on nothing but their career. This also needs to be reworked for clarity, as it is a bit jumbled.



Dear Kevin

Thank you for your advice, but I do not know why this para is a bit jumbled?I just want give some details to explain what kind of the people insurmountable achievement ,they maybe apply themselves to do.Please help me!


I want to know the different between deem and believe,when I put forward an idea

Thank you very much!




This is the new draft

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zhou ruitong
 
EF_KevinThreads: 12
Posts: 6519 [Moderator] 		Edited by: EF_Kevin  Apr 26, 09, 08:01pm   #8
I deem it necessary to correct your mistakes.
You know what? Nobody ever uses the word "deem" anyway, so don't worry about it. It is rare. I believe that it is necessary to correct your mistakes.

When family is in conflict with working, which one will you pay more attention to and spend more time on?

For example the discovery of new technologies and exploitation of new medicine saves people's lives. from terminal diseases like cancer, AIDS or Parkinson disease. So, they worked through the night and morning, neglecting meals and sleep, and even forgeting their parents' birthdays, they focus on nothing but their career.

Wonderful though the advantages of spending more time in work may be, they cannot compete with the benefits that enjoying time with families; brings about when the importance of communication within families should be taken into consideration.

After working all day they're exhausted, and they don't have any energy to play with their children, even to take care of their children's physical and mental health. So the child stays home alone day by day, and he always feels lonely and he only can talk with his toy -- he does not know how to communicate with others. If things continue like this the child will be an autism even become inadequate develop a weak personality.

Although I concede that there may be a few virtues that come with people paying more attention to their careers, I feel that the merits of enjoying time with the families are more meaningful. From what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it is more important to spend time with families than working overtime.

Keep working hard; keep reading and writing! I can tell you work hard to get it right.

Kevin, EssayForum.com
 
florazhouThreads: 5
Posts: 29 		 Apr 26, 09, 08:35pm   #9
EF_Kevin:
Keep working hard; keep reading and writing! I can tell you work hard to get it right.

Dear Kevin

Thank you very much!

My rework one
2009-4-27 9:33
In daily life， so many problems are worth considering carefully. when family is in conflict with working， Which one you will pay more attention to and spend more time on? Contrary to the opinion of many people who believe that people should spend more time working hard, it is my heartfelt belief that nothing compares to taking time with families enjoying a cozy afternoon.


It would be possible at first to take the view that the young people should pay more attention to their jobs. The main argument is that the young people are longing for the lead position in their company, such as project manager or satrap. They are eager to obtain the insurmountable achievement in their vocation, because they are young and they have promising futures.For example the discovery of new technologies and exploitation of new medicine saves lives. So they worked through the night and morning, neglects his meals and sleep, and even forgetting their parents' birthdays, they focus on nothing but their career.


Wonderful though, the advantages of spending more time in work may be, they cannot compete with the benefits that enjoying time with families, the importance of communication with families should be taken into consideration.
The more frequently people communicate with the families, the more harmonious the relationship among family members is.The families are the reason why people working so hard, the families are the right ones who can share the happiness and sorrows with and the families are the impetus why the people pursuit the better life. The important of the families to a human can never be exaggerated.

A general survey conducted official demonstrates that the number of autism children have more than tripled as compare with that of last year. Working takes up nearly all daytime of the parents, they devoid themselves to their jobs. After working all day their exhausted and, they don't have any energy to play with their children, even to take care of their children's physical and mental health. So the child stays home alone day by day, he always feels lonely and only can talk with his toy—he does not know how to communicate with others. If things continue like this the child will develop a weak personality. This adversity can be avoidable, if the parents taking more time with their children, the fact may goes to a positive way. so the advantage of spending more time with the families goes without saying.

Although I consent that there may be a few virtues that come with people paying more attention to their career, I feel that the merits of enjoying time with the families are more meaningful. From what has been discussed above, we may safely arrive at the conclusion that it is more important to spend time with families than working overtime.

zhou ruitong
 
EF_KevinThreads: 12
Posts: 6519 [Moderator] 		 Apr 27, 09, 06:09pm   #10
When family is in conflict with working， which one will you will pay more attention to and spend more time on?

...the more harmonious the relationships among family members will be.

The importance of the family to humans ...

NUMBER AGREEMENT:
young people are longing for the lead positions in their companies, such as...

virtues that come with people paying more attention to their careers, I feel that the merits..

But "number agreement" is a mistake everyone makes, even people who grew up speaking English. Now your English is a lot better!!!

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