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Essay about Instant Gratification and how it influences my generation


Dbarrows1 1-1  Oct 24, 09, 07:23pm  #
Feedback on how to make it flow better is greatly appreciated.






OMG! LOL!! THAT WUZ SO KOOL!!!

Did you understand that? It's understandable if you didn't. Even I- a person who has grown up in my generation have trouble comprehending such speech. If you did understand it, then it seems as if you have already adapted to what is increasingly becoming the most common language spoken by my generation - a generation of instant messengers (IM'ers) and texters and, more frighteningly, a generation that prides itself on being a society of instant gratification.

Webster's dictionary defines instant messaging as " means or system for transmitting electronic messages instantly". And what an apt definition it is! Instant- so characteristic of my generation! We have slowly transformed into a society that is restless and impatient. We have developed the ideal that society is obligated to satisfy our needs, to give us that "instant fix." We have become a nation that wants instant everything. Instant service. Instant medical care. . Instant wealth. We even have instant noodles to satisfy our late night cravings. We want things done now, regardless of the circumstances of the situation. With technology such email, IM, texting, and sites like Facebook and Twitter that allow us to satisfy our social needs, who can blame us for becoming too anxious?

Our problem seems to lie in the expectation that we want solutions to our problems to be handed to us on a silver plate My generation becomes antagonized whenever we have to wait for something; we become disheartened whenever we don't get our way. My generation speaks about how they want to become rich and famous by winning the lottery, playing professional sports, or making quick investments in the stock market. Some college graduates feel that they deserve to earn the kind of wealth their parents and grandparents had accumulated over a lifetime - all within a few years of graduating college. Today, people can't even walk along the sidewalks without the constant need to text or be on a cell phone. People never use old fashion "snail" mail nor do they even utilize email anymore just because it isn't "instant". Whatever ever happened to the belief that "patience is a virtue" that our parents preached to us when we were children?

Most teenagers today fail to realize the implications that their "instant" mentality is creating not only for our generation but for future ones as well. It is disheartening to realize that many of my peers are so detached from reality that they believe that many major issues can and will be solved through quick fixes.They are covinced that problems can be solved without a good old time and effort.. A little change here and there and presto! Everything will be fine and dandy - right?

Historical Legends such as Ben Franklin worked tirelessly in an era that was devoid of technology. Still, despite being "low tech", more pride in knowledge and more effort to become a more virtuous person has allowed such individuals to achieve a level of success few can imitate. Today, many grandparents still try to instill the virtues of hard work. It is not unheard of to hear stories of how today's generation has become more ungrateful and complaining.
My parents have instilled the belief that success in life is the fruition of years of hard work, that there are no shortcuts to success in life. I believe that my generation has to open up our eyes and realize that instant isn't always better. Quick fixes may be fine and dandy but in the long run, we have to realize that patience and determination will ultimately solve our problems.

The sheer adacity of this generation to... oh, it is a shame that I have to go but it seems that I just got a text

David Barrows
 
ebby2010 6-55 Edited by: ebby2010  Oct 25, 09, 03:22pm  #
"Even I- a person who has grown up in my generation have trouble comprehending such speech."
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that's kinda redundant and awkward--of course you grew up in your generation. you're not from the future! a suggestion on how to fix it: "Even I--a person who has grown up in a generation in which this sort of speech is continually exchanged--have trouble comprehending such language."

**generation is used too many times in the first paragraph**

The third paragraph ends too abruptly. try using a transition into the 4th paragraph.
same with the 4th paragraph--ends too abruptly.

as far as the last sentence, i like it =) but you should word it differently.

hope this helps =)

Ebtisam Zeynu
 

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