Essay Writing Feedback

to be honest, i am not really comfortable with this essay. i think that it is not... »»

If you want your writing to really sizzle, use fewer adjectives and more expressive verbs. That will... »»

I'm also glad that you made references to the poets. But I think there's some information here... »»

You need to greatly tighten up this essay. You might start by looking at how the elements... »»

This is great, very engaging. I couldn't stop reading because of the emotion it conveyed.... »»

I will join in an international lecture on how to develop pharmacists' education in Vietnam and some... »»

Hi Sean, I've just met a structure that I don't understand. Would you please explain it... »»

You say right. I'm a pharmacist. That maybe a reason why my essay like a writing on... »»

EF_Stephen：thank you for your advice. but i am confused how to improve my vocabulary problem. how... »»

many thanks to u, i have just rewritten, pl check for me again.thank so much Task... »»

ainash After reading your essay, I understand why no one has made response. Although my English... »»

Oh wow, thanks for the help! »»

these are some reasons indicate that it is necessary to reduce that show the necessary in reducing... »»

Thank Stehen for your help. »»

Nita S: ere we can consider ethics, while personally I do not feel that it is horribly... »»

hi feom my view , i dont know if it is a contrast essay or A&D essay,... »»

ollowing the North America were are the Latin America and Europe with 25.7% and 20.5% in total... »»

The civilization's progress is often the target of many countries or even many people. In the eyes... »»

Thank you so much for the advice. =) »»

Thanks Sean specifally for the examples you gave. I can see how weak the first structure is.... »»

Dear EF_ Kevin, Although I handed in the essay to my professor, your advice is... »»

Contain more personal examples, then the essay will be better, in my opinion. »»

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I am not sure if the "other types of communication" in the qns is restricted to the... »»

Hi thinh, I think not all people in Vietnam who has been go abroad do not go... »»

Hi, I don't think mobile phones create a lot of problem for our life and "... »»

First one is a going to be a hookah lounge called the "X-Hale," and from there I... »»

hi, in essay or any academic writing should avoid using some pronoun such as you, we, i... »»

Your essay is excellent! However, I think if there is a conclusion in each paragraph, it will... »»

I had tried to write well, and it still be writen like this. thanks ,it... »»

Hi Jeannie, This is a Toefl iBT integrated writing task. After reading a passage & listening... »»

Noumon: but ever since that faithful night "fateful" night? Wait a minute, this is... »»

Hugcr84001: Coming home from a long shift from work, my girlfriend greeted me at the front door... »»

the consciousness of earning money seriously by their own effort to cover their education tuitions and personal... »»

Thank you. i really appreciate. i will redo it as soon as possible. besides, what else... »»

Hi, people will be able to lead a normal and stable in the world. After "a", there... »»

You write very clearly, and with good grammar. I think there is an error in that... »»

Verb tense and number agreement are giving you some difficulty: There are lots of unfair events... »»

Your have some grammar errors in this essay, but I would do some revision before I worried... »»

Your essay is based on your personal experience. It's good however the overuse of these experiences makes... »»

thanks mocixuan so much, your advices are very useful, thanks so much again, how do y think... »»

This is very good. Your transitions are smooth, and your flow is logical. I always think... »»

I think that the revision is better from a purely objective essay perspective. If I were grading... »»

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Yeah talk about how one of the two has helped you with something also how it truly... »»

Although there are some advantages to of learning a foreign language in its original country, I firmly... »»

many thanks to you, EF_Sean i will correct them. Test 2 G ielts cam 6 Using... »»

syntaxmonster: he remarkable story Celia, a Slave truly shows one of the most disturbing times in American... »»

aroundtheworld: When we cast aside superfluous information like God's shape, form and his story of creation, we... »»

Thanks Stephen. Do you think my paper follow the topic and answer the questions? »»

The first thing I notice is that the vocabulary is way beyond you. You don't use these... »»

i have just rewritten. ple check for me. i try with my best, and i cannot find... »»

i have just rewritten. pl check for me, with my english, i cannot point out my mistakes,... »»

I think you misunderstand. That was a rhetorical question. Vietnam is in fact an S-shaped country. It... »»

Thank you for the advice. I completley agree with your comments about the last paragraph.... »»

Hi quiksilverq, I think your essay presents your points very well! But I don't know... »»

vivien_wang: Yes, I agree that art should not be limited either. But, you know, this does not... »»

It isn't for a test. It is school work. »»

dear EF_Stephen, i was not comfortable with this essay. in this essay, i have to answer :... »»

thanks for the feed back »»