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I really love your writing style. Some people think they know what "good" writing is, but good... »»

Many thanks Kevin! I appreciate your help! »»

Some people who live in a big city believe that the best place for them is a... »»

yes I knew that my orgenization is weak. I have done correction to this artical. »»

Thanks all for your support. »»

The second example I wrote above should have been this one: 2) She is a very... »»

Some people think that city living has more benefits than country living. ...country living, so we... »»

Well, the essay does not intend anything. I like to write: This essay is intended to... »»

xit9zangel i like it, also dont forget spellcheck since there are a lot of mistakes »»

On the one side, people think that it would be better when... When you use the... »»

Consideration of Others—I will demonstrate a concern for the welfare and rights of others, and I will... »»

I think you should use numbers diffwerently: During my three years at high school my main... »»

Nowadays, everybody is moving to live in the cities because of the facilities that they find it... »»

Thanks Kelvin, well appreciated. »»

However in my opinion, a city would be the best place for the growth of a child.... »»

Luke and west, thanks for helping here! TV channels like National Geographic, Discovery and The Animal... »»

Yes, but you should also discuss the issues raised by other people who help. Bilal caught some... »»

thinh, thanks for getting the first half! I'll do some more of it: This is supposed... »»

I agree... for example, commas: Different views, such as the aims to undertake an academic study... »»

For instance, we can invent new technique to help endangered animals to produce offspring to be sure... »»

This really is very impressive. I googled it, because I thought you must have copied it... »»

Every day should be 2 words the way you are using it. As one word, it means... »»

According to absolutist moral philosophy, you might say it is never appropriate to hurt a weaker creature... »»

nice essay. although the way i understand it only states 1 thesis statement (it is beneficial for... »»

Kenvin, could u check for me again. i have added 2 sentences There is no doubt... »»

thanks so much Kevin. i know that if i can do it, my essay will be excellent.... »»

Thank a lots Kevin that you help and encourage for my writing. Big thanks !!! »»

You talk about everything on what you did on the mall like what kind of stuff you... »»

Thanks EF_Kevin, It would be really helpful for me. »»

If... then. If I could meet a famous entertainer, then it would definitely... Number agreement: But... »»

After the first sentence, you should add 2 more sentences to the first paragraph. Add a... »»

The bad news, however, is that people are unknowingly deceiving and harming themselves with admiration for celebrities... »»

...still keep capital punishment in practice. Excellent discussion. I tend to agree with you.... »»

I see that Thinh and hatung94 wrote about the same topic, but I want to clarify that... »»

Well, it depends on the criteria for grading! If you are trying to write in English without... »»

Heh, I kind of made to hell with punctuation (".") that helps avoid incoherence. »»

The restaurant serves... The restaurants serve... The restaurant opens... The restaurants open... You should look... »»

rmli did a fine job on this! It is so nice that rmli spent so much... »»

Look at the advice that I just gave here http://www.essayforum.com/essay-writing-feedback-3/think-ski ll-person-should-have-order-succeed-modern-world-10049/#msg4 7620 You write very well... »»

In my opinion, the most important skill to be successful in today's world is the ability to... »»

Move this comma: As I wander the halls of My High School, I often reflect back on... »»

Nowadays, education is socialized largely, so everyone has many opportunities for learning. People discuss whether high education... »»

You'll have to cut some of the details from the first half of the essay. Do... »»

All our daily meals are sufficiently supplied by parents and relatives, and all that is required of... »»

This is some great collaboration, here, everyone! Here is some more help: Nowadays, education is one... »»

I think your essay is too simple you should choose more complex and valuable words, and, as... »»

"We didn't have a rubric..." This would annoy me, putting it mildly. I never read... »»

Oh!!!Thank you very much!!! I will take it »»

When people ask whether or not renewable resources of energy will soon replace the traditional resources of... »»

Thanks Christina! Those are good corrections. Here are some more: Self-motivated students may be more... »»

Claire C Winston Churchill once said:Never,never,never,never give up. I think he only said : 'Never,never,never give... »»

Thanks for your comment ^^! »»

Lots of students will face such a dilemma -- the decision to work either in a large... »»

Well, the first sentence is in rough shape. How about this: Natural magic had an impact on... »»

In the beginning, it would be good if you use " " marks around "wants" and "needs."... »»

Thanks EF Kevin and Flying seahors for your suggestions. This would help me alot. »»

It looks like you need to do a paragraph break, perhaps just before "In this story"...that will... »»

In your essay, Although both groups think they are right? There should not be question mark.... »»

Thanks for your help. I appreciate it :D »»

Thanks Darius, that is some great work! This essay is good! It does not have... »»