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This is perfect English! You don't have any mistakes that I can see. I just have... »»

When I found the chance of studying in a group with my classmates, I wished I can... »»

Hi, your intro was terrific, It reveals that in a small companiescompany, there is less... »»

Hi, My suggestions, around 500 words, It's not acceptable for ETS ! ..more because it is... »»

I'm not sure if I corrected everything but I did as much as I could: The... »»

To Moderator, please I am little confused about my this essay. I suddenly realized that its... »»

Would someone please tell me if I'm even on the right track or if my content is... »»

Some people think children's spending time on TV, video and PC games is good, while others think... »»

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"Watching Television is bad for children" agree or disagree? Please check it Television plays very important... »»

pcvrz34g: blue skies... that's so cool. is that your motto? "Blue skies!" is a skydiver's way of... »»

"Country boys" is the new type of documentary movie that I have ever watched because it is... »»

*Can someone please just check my grammar?* Section One After reading one of Shirley Jackson's most famous... »»

Oh, I think the title was just too long for the amount of space allowed. It was... »»

The beginning is great! It is actually quite interesting at the start, because I think it is... »»

Hi please give your feed back . I am preparing for toefl and would like to have... »»

Hi can you please tell me from where you are taking this topics. I have not learn... »»

That first sentence up at the top is a little rough: The statement, "experience is the best... »»

I have two fantastic boys in my family that were born four years apart and are as... »»

omg i think you are in my class! i have the same thing... 4 exam questions too... »»

Having trouble writing this synthesis essay which I am supposed to analyze 2 essays and switch from... »»

Hi, I have corrected to some degree and given you ideas for sentence changes.The first paragraph is... »»

Looking good. If you get inspired, maybe you will come up with a more intriguing first line.... »»

Thank you very much Sir Kevin! Can anyone help me think of a good title for... »»

I am trying to look at the sociological phenomenon of colonization as a process, similar to another... »»

Very true, Kevin. I will also point out that sending your teacher's feedback back to them graded... »»

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While I was studing for the mid-term math exam, When I was preparing myself in the library... »»

is there any grammer mistakes??? don't start a new thread for the same essay sorry about... »»

How true and terrible that Twain quote is! Hey, I don't understand that last sentence of... »»

Hi, what I can suggest about the timings is... 1.Do practice with timer on. Say 20 mins... »»

This is basic part of our life. There are many things in our lives which are... »»

Although new invention will changed the world more or less, only a few inventions can take the... »»

Throughout my middle school and high school educational courses, I had a good grade in English. I... »»

Some suggestions: Why don't you use a motivator at first? profitable and enjoyable are not precise... »»

The fascination with our First Lady's hair has a lot of people scratching their heads, but not... »»

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Thanks, Arjun, I noticed some of the same things. The age of fifteen is a time... »»

Maethirion: She is the bane of my existence. No using cliches at EssayForum! :-)... »»

From the great, great work that margarita and rmli did, I can see that you have to... »»

Scratch that weak first sentence and start with this: I believe that my parents have driven me... »»

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Wow, you're a very good writer! Your essay is powerful and interesting all the way through.... »»

I am impressed! Most compare/contrast essays are very rigid and robotic, but your opening paragraph is so... »»

I think some statements in your essay don't develop well. For example" If a teacher wants... »»

Thanks for posting, long-time lurker! your last para needs help: As we have analyze... »»

"Action movies are full filling to many movie watchers because it supplies audiences with electrifying excitement, presents... »»

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I am a chinese student who will take toefl test. My essay's structure is similiar with yours.... »»

your essay makes sense but a thesis sentence would improve it »»

thanks a lot for all the feedback. I'll keep in mind all the corrections. I hope... »»

These fields contain the utmost beautiful flowers, and the weather is out of this world. It only... »»

My first big experience (of XXXXXXX) occurred when I was eight years old... ...which is something... »»

...ing and suspending a driver's license decreases road accidents, brings maturity for young drivers and teaches citizen... »»

I really love your writing style. Some people think they know what "good" writing is, but good... »»

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