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Red-Winged Black Bird
One warm and breezy morning, upon arriving to the Pond Apple Slough, a beautiful black bird that exhibited unique colors captivated my eyes. Coming from the south direction, he flew across the sky and landed on a tree. As he sat on the tree he began to sing. He seemed to be singing to himself, or looking for a mate.
The red winged black bird has a jet black glossy appearance. His round and flat head moves quickly as he turns his head from side to side. His eyes possess the qualities of an onyx gemstone. His beak is shaped like a dagger, known to catch his prey. In addition to that, his beak resembles the color seen in a dark rain cloud.
While perched up in a tree, his broad and sturdy shoulders manifest his dominant physique. His cherry red and lemon-like colored shoulders give him a unique quality unlike any other bird. These bright and vivid colors reflected into the sunlight. His jet black glossy appearance complements his unique colored shoulders. His shoulders begin to puff out as he sings his musical high pitched song.
His voice sounds like a flute, as he sings his high pitched song. An admirable voice, that lingers in ones ears. His high-pitched call softens the perfect mood, into a relaxed state of mind. A sound where one can drift away into space. A place of paradise, and happiness that comes to being.
His jagged-shaped wings began to shine, as he gracefully flew into the sky. His wings moved elegantly as he flew away into the sea blue sky. He flew like a kite being lifted into the air. He glides from side to side into the cool breezy air. His wings spread out wonderfully.
His fan-shaped tail is in open view trailing behind him. His glossy black colored tail resembles a satin like material. So delicate and lovely like a new born baby. His tail looks more prominent when he flies into the sky.
His claw-like feet begin to curl in as he lures himself against the wind. His sharp claws help him grip onto trees, and show his agility. While on the ground he scrambles to devour his next meal. He then takes off into the magnificent sea blue sky.
So when visiting the Pond Apple Slough, and a high pitched thrill sound cries out, just look up in the sky, or low on the ground, for a black glossy bird with onyx gemstone eyes, a dagger shaped beak, cherry red and lemon like colored shoulders , jagged-shaped wings, with a fan shaped tail, and claw like feet. Yes you've guessed it; it's the beautiful and magnificent red winged black bird.