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King Lear Paragraph - Forming a good topic sentence?


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Feb 17, 2011   #1
I was assigned to write a paragraph on how Goneril's treatment of her father was, to an extent, justified.

I came up with some points, all of which revolve around the fact that Lear's riotous entourage of a hundred knights clearly disrupted the sanctity of Goneril's castle so her decision to dismiss half of Lear train was good justification.

I just need help constructing a clear and concise topic sentence which resonates my argument well.

Help would be greatly appreciated.

Thanks.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13,321 129  
Feb 19, 2011   #2
Hi George, great question. You seem to have a pretty good sentence here already, so I suspect that you are getting thwarted by something else.

Look:
Lear's riotous entourage of a hundred knights clearly disrupted the sanctity of Goneril's castle so her decision to dismiss half of Lear train was good justification.

The only change I need to suggest is for you to change the end.... it should say well-justified instead of good justification. "Justification" is the excuse for doing something.

But this only enables you to write one paragraph. After writing this topic sentence, you will write a paragraph with examples or a quote, etc,. but then you will need to give another point of justification and write body para #2. After that, perhaps you should write a paragraph to "refute the counter-argument." Google that.

:-)
OP Brwned 1 / 1  
Feb 19, 2011   #3
Lear's riotous entourage of a hundred knights clearly disrupted the sanctity of Goneril's castle thus her decision to dismiss half of Lear train was, to an extent, well-justified.

Haha, I guess that does work as a topic sentence although I did create a longer and more detailed one.

Lear, being a tragically superficial and self-indulgent ruler, unmistakably does not see his own folly when Goneril criticizes him and his entourage for disrupting the sanctity of her castle, despite it being a well-justified claim.

Which one is stronger?
EF_Susan - / 2,364 12  
Feb 25, 2011   #4
unmistakably does not see

I don't think this is worded correctly.

The first one is better. I think you should put a semi-colon after castle.
:-)


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