Making a Good Public Speaking Essay

I'm Thai student, Faculty of Arts in English majoring, Mahidol University.
Please check it for me, I'm not good at writng. Your reccommand will help me too much. ^,^

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Making a Good Public Speaking

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Greetings!

Writing in a foreign language is certainly a challenge! I think the content of your essay is very good. You make a lot of important points about what a good speech should contain. You do have quite a lot of grammatical errors, however. I can't correct all of them for you, but I'll address a few:

"Not everyone can speak agilely in front of publics." - it's "the public"

"If you extract from another sources, you should give them credit by referring their name." - "If you use other sources, you should give them credit by referencing their names."

"Audiences are convinced that you pay attention to when you look at them all." - I think you meant "Audiences will pay better attention to you if you look at them while you speak."

"Using of body language can overcome your nervous and you will yield a good speaking." - "Using body language can help you overcome your nervousness and yield a good speech." (Although "yield" is not quite the word; "deliver a better speech" would be better.)

"Good speakers open a speech with dramatic and end with impression which call the applause from listener. " - "Good speakers open a speech with a dramatic statement and end with a strong impression that makes the audience want to applaud."

"Although the advices above do not produce amateur orators become the experts, they can have a better public speaking with more confident." - "Although the advice given above will not turn amateur orators into experts [or "professionals"], it will help them speak in public with more confidence."

"Once, there is one speaker who has never spoken in front a lot of people. " - "Once there was a speaker who had never spoken in front of a lot of people."

"She thought she cannot do it as well as her senior who brought the victory for my school." - "She thought she could not do it as well as [? not sure what "her senior" means] who brought victory to her school."

This will get you started. I know grammar is difficult at first, but keep working and you'll do well!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com

Thank you for your kindness. ^,^

You're very welcome!

Sarah

Mar 11, 07 / 10:39am - Attached on merging:
I need a help!(For the second draft)

Have you remebered my essay, Making a Good public Speaking? My teacher said that I had to turn the conclusion into informative instead of detecttive style, but I don't know what I should inform at the end. Could you please suggest me about this? How do I make the reader remember best?

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This is my second draft:

Making a Good Public Speaking

Have you ever got nervous when facing the audience? Have you ever been disgrace on the stage? Not everyone can speak agilely in front of the public. In Wikipedia Website said, 'Public speaking is speaking to a group of people in a structured, deliberate manner intended to inform, influence, or entertain the listeners.' Therefore, a good speech should be substantial and engaging. A lot of people are anxious when they are required to make a speech on ceremonious topic because they cannot entertain or influence another. It is quite hard to create an affecting speaking with beneficial information. However, it is nothing impossible if you are firmly attentive. There are three main points which the most orators should concern for making a good public speaking including preparation, body languages, and speaking skills.

The perfect preparation brings on successful delivery which has three steps. Firstly, finding out themes and points on your topic and write them down with sources. You have to interpret what the main idea is and how many points of your title and make a list for your clarified understanding. If you use other sources, you should give them credit by referencing their names. Then, make an outline so that you will understand the structure of your speech. In your outline you should write the introduction, body, and conclusion; you will be clear what you would mention first and lastly. You should rehearse your speech as much as you can before an appointed day. You will know your weakness and ruin it immediately. The more you have practiced, the more you are confident.

The appropriate body languages produce an interesting oration. Eye-contact is the most importance body language which all of speakers would have. Audiences will pay better attention to you if you look at them while you speak. If you are not confident enough, you may think their heads are only turnips and cabbages. Hand gestures are frequently used while you are speaking. You should move your hands sometimes, but not always to cause natural speaking. For example, raise one finger up when you said one, or open wide your hands when you mentioned to all audiences. Do not stand still even you speak on serious topic. The stage belongs to you, utilize it. You should walk around the stage to catch all of audiences. Using body language can help you overcome your nervousness and deliver a better speech.

Without any speaking skills, even the best title of the world can be boring. Good speakers open a speech with a dramatic statement and end with an impression that makes the audiences want to applaud. Do not open like you do not know exactly what you will say, you will be less reliable. Your ending should give useful properties, such as motto or suggestion. Many famous speakers make an excellent rhythm and know when they should pause for audiences' reaction. You should stop for a while to observe agreements or wait for laughing when you have made humours from your audiences. Do not speak too fast or too slow. Lastly, good delivers know which part has to stressed or unstressed for breaking down boring. Imagine you are listening to monotone speech, would you like to sleep? You should speak vitally; your voice and story will be pleasant. No matter what topic you get; good speaking skills make it become fascinating.

Although the advices given above will not turn amateur orators into experts, it will help them speak better in front of the public with more confidence. We must not expect to be the professional on speaking, but we need to express our profitable details to audiences naturally and attractively. Once there was a speaker who had never spoken in front of a lot of people had competed in the Provincial Speech Contest. She had thought she could not do it as well as another student who had brought the victory for the school. She had to prepare and practice speaking skills with appropriate gestures and appearances within four weeks. When the day came, there were many rivals with their qualified speaking who she would compete with. Anyway, her first public speaking, applauses occurred around the hall as soon as she had finished that did not happen to every competitor, and she is me!

Greetings!

Yes, I do remember your fine speech! :-) I am not exactly sure what your teacher means by informative instead of detective style, although I could make an educated guess. The usual way to end an essay is to sum up the major points you have made. You would say something like, "Although a bit of advice will not turn an amateur orator into an expert overnight, remembering a few important steps can make a big improvement. Making an outline, using appropriate body language and eye contact, creating a dramatic opening and ending with a memorable motto or suggestion will make a speech on any topic stand out. In short, it is not what you say but how you say it!"

I hope this helps!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com

Thank you Sarah. You help me again.

You're welcome!

Sarah