Attn: BU essay (due Dec. 31st) Thank you, Sarah

Essay Section: This section of the application gives you an opportunity to present yourself in a way that grades and test scores cannot. The Board of Admissions uses your essay to determine your ability to organize thoughts and express yourself clearly. Accordingly, we ask that you prepare this work entirely on your own. Please note: All students must submit the short essay listed below.

If you are applying to Sargent College, the School of Education, the College of Engineering, the College of Communication, the School of Hospitality Administration, the School of Management, or any of the accelerated programs (the Seven-Year Liberal Arts/Medical Education Program, the Seven-Year Liberal Arts/Dental Education Program, or the New Jersey Medical School Seven-Year Medical Program), you must submit essay number 1.

We would like to know, in no more than 500 words, what experiences have led you to select your professional field and objective. Complete only if you are applying to Sargent College, the School of Education, the College of Engineering, the College of Communication, the School of Hospitality Administration, the School of Management, or any of the accelerated programs.

essay:

Mass communication today is no longer limited to the art of verbal expression, as technology and visual expression have become inextricably tied to global communications. To gain experience in the more technical aspects of communication, I successfully applied to the schools' yearbook team and trained myself in the use of design programs such as InDesign and Photoshop, later taking the skills with me to the Southeast Regional Occupation Program graphic design class, in which I honed my skills in expert graphic design.
In college, I plan to further cultivate my passion and build upon my nascent technical knowledge of modern-day communications to eventually make important contributions to the field of mass communications. To prepare, I engaged in oratory activities during high school.
Unaware of the rigors of the program, I was pressured by parents and peers to enter Model United Nations (MUN) at school. After struggling through two weeks of class, I desperately wanted to drop it, for all the students were confident and assertive, unafraid to express themselves, while I was different: lonely, shy, and lacking self-esteem. In time, however, I began to overcome fears of what people thought of me, and eventually conquered my apprehension about public speaking. The conferences we attended over weekends and during school really gave me an opportunity to meet new people, and see the various ways people express themselves in speech and thought. I learned that vocalizing my assertions came as second nature as long as I was well- researched and prepared. The preparation was always painstaking, but worth the effort.
Following my stint in MUN, I joined C-HIGH TV, my school's newly-developed broadcasting program of two years. Starting out as a small seed with no direction, C-HIGH TV was nurtured with creativity and the amazing cooperation of dedicated and enthusiastic students, still in bloom. Working as one of the main anchors, I cooperated with fellow "C-HIGH-ers" to compose daily episodes on student life and activities and other intriguing and sometimes controversial news. Aside from that, we performed charitable acts for the city by hosting the annual Operation Read. This event allows elementary students to be able to preview upcoming movies after reading the book, while encouraging them to read more throughout the year. C-HIGH TV is then in charge of digitally presents this event and other city-organized events on local channels for the community's viewing update.
My passion for communications did not stop there. I pursued more experience in debate by narrowing my focus from the international arena to issues that struck closer to home. I founded the Junior Statesmen of America (JSA) chapter at school last year. By doing so, not only was I able to continue my passion for leading and inspiring debate on important issues, but I was also afforded the opportunity to help others get engaged with what affects our nation daily. JSA lets me choose to speak on a topic I am passionate about, rather than contest on given topics like in MUN. JSA allows its members to be opinionated on issues that directly affect them. However, C-HIGH TV's sudden increase in use of digital programs limits my chances of presentation. Yet, after many adjustments, my passion for communications continues to thrive.

Greetings!

You have written a wonderful essay! I have only a few small corrections to suggest:

"the schools' yearbook" - if you mean one school, it's "school's"; and I think this sentence is too long. Try cutting it in half: "To gain experience in the more technical aspects of communication, I successfully applied to the school's yearbook team and trained myself in the use of design programs such as InDesign and Photoshop. I later took those skills with me to the Southeast Regional Occupation Program graphic design class, in which I honed my skills in expert graphic design."

"well- researched" - remove the space before "researched."

"C-HIGH TV is then in charge of digitally presents this event and other city-organized events on local channels for the community's viewing update." - I think you may have meant "presenting."

"given topics like in MUN." - say "as" instead of "like"

You have definitely demonstrated your ability to organize thoughts and express yourself clearly. Good job!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com