Personal Statement: Help the newbie

Following is an example of what Montclair state university wants from me.

Please attach a personal statement explaining your reasons for seeking admission to Montclair State University, including what you believe are your academic strengths and interests. Be certain to explain any situations that may have had an impact, either positively or negatively, on your academic record.

Please list significant activities in which you have participated, both in school and out of school

I just need something other then I am a good student,don't get into trouble and have been on the honor roll all four years.Outside of school I snowboard but don,t do much with the school.I assisted at CCD classes for the past four years.(only because I knew I might need something to put down in he future)I scored well on the sats ,but they will already know that from my transcripts.I do like math ,but I am unsure of a business degree or a engineering one

Greetings!

I know, sometimes it's hard to take an objective look at your own life; you're just too close!

What I think they're looking for is an idea of your character (are you willing to work, or are you a slacker--which, of course, you're not!). I recommend starting with your academic strengths. You can mention that you did well on the SATs, to show that was important to you and that you put effort into it. Tell them that you have a real interest in math, and you feel many paths are open to you. You might say that you feel college will give you an opportunity to explore the different career paths you might take. I'd put a positive spin on it--for instance, don't use the word "unsure," but instead concentrate on the possibilties you see ahead of you.

They will also want to know what you, as a student, will contribute to the university. If you are passionate about snowboarding and other sports, tell them so. If you have participated in competitions, tell them you will bring the same competitive spirit and enthusiasm to the university. You don't want to give them the impression, of course, that sports are all that interest you (that only works for football and basketball players ;-) ), but you can let them know that you want to be involved in activities on campus.

I hope this gives you a few ideas. You might try asking your friends and/or family what they think your strongest points are, too.

Good luck!

Sarah, EssayForum.com

Thank you
it is a start

You're welcome. Again, good luck!

Sarah