kdarin
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"Vires, Artes, Mores," what characteristics do this Latin philosophy actually exemplify? Embodied in these concepts are various aspects of strength, intellect, and character. Upon self-examination, several variations of these values have been evident throughout the course of my lifetime. Personally, I have demonstrated moral and physical strength, as well as intellectual pursuits and a unique character.
Vires signifies strength, whether it is moral, intellectual, or physical. Apparent in my life, physical and intellectual strength appear to surpass. Overcoming a variety of injuries, as a part of pursuing competitive gymnastics, has helped me develop my overall physical strength. Through striving to be the greatest, I had the ability to conquer those injuries and achieve my personal goals. Along with being physically strong, I am capable of demonstrating intellectual strength. Reflected in my curricular selection and the academic grades I have received, my intellectual power portrays.
Artes, expressed as the beauty of intellectual pursuits through skill and art, is evident in my life, but not in the average approach. Rather than being an artist or musician, my creativity and style portrays through my diving and gymnastics choreography. Elegance and grace are two important factors contributing to the artistic portion of a gymnastics routine and the completion of a springboard dive. The skill and artistic ability required in these aspects represent the significance of beauty.
Character, embodied in the concept Mores, can signify various things for every person. My character is represented by trustworthiness, responsibility, and giving. I consider myself philanthropic. Spending nearly everyday helping elementary students and committing my time to raising money for various causes, such as for The Leukemia and Lymphoma Research, I am always volunteering out in the community. After helping to take care of a younger sibling, I have learned to become responsible in all my actions. In addition, experiencing the social life of a teenager has allowed me to become more trustworthy to everyone. With every experience, there comes a lesson, which continues to build my character.
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EF_Team5
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Good afternoon.
Here are my suggestions:
""Vires, Artes, Mores," what characteristics does this Latin philosophy actually exemplify? Embodied in these concepts are various aspects of strength, intellect, and character. Upon self-examination, several variations of these values have been evident throughout the course of my lifetime. Personally, I have demonstrated moral and physical strength, as well as intellectual pursuits and a unique character.
Vires signifies strength, whether it is moral, intellectual, or physical. Apparent in my life, physical and intellectual strength appear to surpass. Overcoming a variety of injuries, as a part of pursuing competitive gymnastics, has helped me develop my overall physical strength. Through striving to be the greatest, I had the ability to conquer those injuries and achieve my personal goals. Along with being physically strong, I am capable of demonstrating intellectual strength. Reflected in my curricular selection and the academic grades I have received, my intellectual power is obvious.
Artes, expressed as the beauty of intellectual pursuits through skill and art, is evident in my life, but not in the average approach. Rather than being an artist or musician, my creativity and style portrays through my diving and gymnastics choreography. Elegance and grace are two important factors contributing to the artistic portion of a gymnastics routine and the completion of a springboard dive. The skill and artistic ability required to carry out these acts illustrate the significance of beauty in them.
Character, embodied in the concept Mores, can signify various things for every person. My character is identified by trustworthiness, responsibility, and charity. I consider myself philanthropic. Spending nearly everyday helping elementary students and committing my time to raising money for various causes, such as for leukemia and lymphoma research, I am always volunteering out in the community. After helping take care of a younger sibling, I have learned to become responsible in all my actions. In addition, experiencing the social life of a teenager has allowed me to become more trustworthy to everyone. With every experience, there comes a lesson, which continues to build my character."
Nice work. Your conclusion seems a bit abrupt though. How about adding something about how you are more trustworthy to strengthen the claim right before the end, and adding a few sentences at the conclusion about how these traits and experiences will make you a great addition to FSU?
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Gloria
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