Do you think that you are going to be successful business in the future?

This is one of good questions to me because I am unable to predicate what will happen to my future. However, I always desired to be business some day and there is a few reasons why I want to be business. The reason is that my dad was former business and retired in the most recent and second reason, I have been wanting to be millionaire since I was child.

My dad frequently told me about his job experienced what it was like and took several challengers part of his life. He reminds me to become business " Keep in your mind for what your goals are in participating in marketing like Nike meetings so that you will pick group that will help you get what you are looking for". Hence, he made me into attraction the world business such as international business and marketing.

I made a decision to pick business as my career as job in the future. I love building trust and relationships, and seeing how I can help others. In additional, This is a great way to stay visible and give back to groups that have helped me to be rich experience.

I believe in myself that I will be successful business in the future, Because I always am confidence and have organizing connections to world business, a skill that has been in-demand among my friends. Hence, It was no surprise that I decide to explore the viability of a home organizing business when I would have decided to become an entrepreneur.

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"This is a good question for me because I am unable to predicate what will happen to my future. However, I always desired to be business some day and there are a few reasons why I want to be business. The reason is that my dad was a former businessman and is now retired. The second reason I want to be in business is that I have wanted to be a millionair since I was a child.

My dad frequently told me about his job experience; what it was like and how it took several challenges and how they were a part of his life. He reminds me to become business (I don't understand this sentence. What do you mean?)" Keep in your mind, for what your goals are, in participating in marketing with companies like Nike that you will pick a group that will help you get what you are looking for." (I am not sure really what this statement means because it did not make complete sense, so I edited it to what I thought you meant.) Hence, he made me interested in world business, international business, and marketing.

I made the decision to pick business as my career in the future. I love building trust and relationships (Remove comma) and seeing how I can help others. In addition, this is a great way to stay visible and give back to groups that have helped me in the past.

I believe in myself that I will be successful in business in the future. Because I am confident and have organizing connections in world business, a skill that has been in-demand among my friends, it was no surprise when I decided to explore the viability of a home organizing business when I decided to become an entrepreneur. " I don't understand what a home business has to do with international business. Please clarify.

You meaning was not clear at many points in this essay, so if my corrections are not what you meant, please clarify them. Watch your incorrect/inappropriate punctuation and random capitalization. You should expand more on why you think you will be a successful businessperson, since that is the prompt.

Regards,
Gloria
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Thank you for helping me.

"This is a good question for me because I am unable to predicate what will happen to my future. However, I always desired to be business some day and there are a few reasons why I want to be business. The reason is that my dad was a former businessman and is now retired. The second reason I want to be in business is that I have wanted to be a millionair since I was a child.

My dad frequently told me about his job experience; what it was like and how it took several challenges and how they were a part of his life. He also want me to become business and he said " Keep in your mind to succeed in general business, How?, in participating in marketing with companies like Nike that you will pick a group that will help you get what you are looking for." Hence, he made me interested in world business, international business, and marketing.

I made the decision to pick business as my career in the future. I love building trust and relationships and seeing how I can help others. In addition, this is a great way to stay visible and give back to groups that have helped me in the past.

I believe in myself that I will be successful in business in the future. Because I am confident and have abilities in organizing connections in world business. Otherwise, This is my strong desired to be business person as career as I want.

You're welcome.

Let's take another look:

"This is a good question for me because I am unable to predicate what will happen to my future. However, I always desired to be in business some day and there are a few reasons why. The first reason is that my dad was a former businessman and is now retired. The second reason is that I have wanted to be a millionair since I was a child.

My dad frequently told me about his job experience; what it was like and how it took several challenges and how they were a part of his life. He also wants me to be in business and he said "Keep in your mind to succeed in general business. How? In participating in marketing with companies like Nike that you will pick a group that will help you get what you are looking for." Hence, he made me interested in world business, international business, and marketing.

I made the decision to pick business as my career in the future. I love building trust and relationships and seeing how I can help others. In addition, this is a great way to stay visible and give back to groups that have helped me in the past.

I believe in myself; that I will be successful in business in the future. Because I am confident and have abilities in organizing connections in world business. This is my strong desire to be successful in this career I want."

This is much more concise and easy to read. Still a few corrections, but a large improvement. Nice work.

Regards,
Gloria
Moderator, EssayForum.com